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Nowadays companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear uniform Think about jobs where uniform is important What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform v.2

Nowadays companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear uniform Think about jobs where uniform is important What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform v. 2
The topic of whether companies or organisations should require employees to wear a uniform is of concern for many people. Some believe that it is important for companies’ professional images while others disagree. As for me, I strongly agree the former. Those who assert uniforms hold the following reasons. Firstly, uniforms can create one’s sense of discipline and identity. When employees are wearing identical outfits with specific logo, they are reminded that their roles are to make contributions to the company, thereby putting more effort on their work as they feel as a member of a big family. Secondly, all staffs do not worry about what to wear on the flowing day. As the certain clothes have been decided in working hours, employees will not have to spend time in a shop to select business suits for daily use, which ultimately saves enormous sum for all workers. However, on no account should we ignore the drawbacks of this trend. To start with, there are a small number of people feel that the uniforms are uncomfortable. For example, one may have problems in selecting the correct size or be allergic to the particular material. In this case, employees will not perform well as they focus on their clothes instead of their job, which has adverse impacts on business advancement. Besides, staff members may lose enthusiasm when they have to wear the same colours and dresses. Being creative and imaginative, some workers who are designers or advertisers can get bored and less excited with the influence of uniforms as they do not feel their distinct identities. To sum up, I will recommend every employee to wear identical uniforms because the advantages far outweigh the downsides. However, the company should design a set of good uniforms to suit all employees.
The topic of whether
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companies
or
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organisations
should require
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employees
to
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wear
a
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uniform
is of concern for
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many
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people
.
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Some
believe that it is
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important
for
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companies’
professional images while others disagree. As for me, I
strongly
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agree
the former.

Those who assert
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uniforms
hold the following reasons.
Firstly
,
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uniforms
can create one’s sense of discipline and identity. When
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employees
are wearing identical outfits with specific logo, they
are reminded
that their roles are to
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make
contributions to the
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company
, thereby putting more effort on their work as they feel as a member of a
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big
family.
Secondly
, all staffs do not worry about what to
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wear
on the flowing day. As the certain clothes have
been decided
in working hours,
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employees
will not
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have to
spend time in a shop to select business suits for daily
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use
, which
ultimately
saves enormous sum for all workers.

However
, on no account should we
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ignore
the drawbacks of this trend. To
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start
with, there are a
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small
number of
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people
feel that the
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uniforms
are uncomfortable.
For example
, one may have problems in selecting the correct size or be allergic to the particular material.
In this case
,
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employees
will not perform well as they focus on their clothes
instead
of their job, which has adverse impacts on business advancement.
Besides
, staff members may lose enthusiasm when they
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have to
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wear
the same
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colours
and dresses. Being creative and imaginative,
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some
workers who are designers or advertisers can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
bored and less excited with the influence of
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uniforms
as they do not feel their distinct identities.

To sum up, I will recommend every
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employee
to
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wear
identical
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uniforms
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because
the advantages far outweigh the downsides.
However
, the
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company
should design a set of
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good
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uniforms
to suit all
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employees
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear uniform Think about jobs where uniform is important What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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