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Many people are choosing to find information online rather than in books. Is this development positive or negative? v.5

Many people are choosing to find information online rather than in books. Is this development positive or negative? v. 5
In the era of modernisation, people have several options for different purposes ranging from clothes to food. Some school of thought suggests that these days, individuals have various choices regarding everything. I strongly agree that today humans have an endless number of things from which they can prefer as per their likes and dislikes. Firstly, the clothes had been available in bulk as well as in a variety of brands, and designs. Human civilizations have transformed the lifestyle of mankind, which has enhanced their living standard. Also, clothes play an essential role in human's lives that improve their personality. For instance, a researcher has conducted a survey in which he reported that people choose their attire for different occasion due to multiple choices. Therefore, having too many options makes life easy and convenient. Secondly, eating food varies on a person's taste as they are distinct type of foods available in the markets from local to foreign ones. In case, if someone gets monotonous by having the same meal on a daily basis, then he/ she will have an option to eat other dishes from another country or region to change their intake of food. In contrary, there are some restrictions on the number of choices, which people have in their lives as somewhere it lacks due to some extent such as till now there is no treatment for some medical problems, then how can we say that we have several options these days when they are just limited to some things. To conclude, it is generally said that nowadays, people have many options in terms of various aspects. Folks, do have choices to make but they are limited to some extent till now, and hopefully they should not be there in the future.
In the era of
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modernisation
,
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people
have several
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options
for
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different
purposes ranging from clothes to food.
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Some
school of
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thought
suggests that these days, individuals have various
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choices
regarding everything. I
strongly
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agree
that
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today
humans have an endless number of things from which they can prefer as per their likes and dislikes.

Firstly
, the clothes had been available in bulk
as well
as in a variety of brands, and designs. Human civilizations have transformed the lifestyle of mankind, which has enhanced their living standard.
Also
, clothes play an essential role in human's
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lives
that
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improve
their personality.
For instance
, a researcher has conducted a survey in which he reported that
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people
choose their attire for
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different
occasion due to multiple
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choices
.
Therefore
, having too
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many
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options
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makes
life easy and convenient.

Secondly
, eating food varies on a person's taste as they are distinct type of foods available in the markets from local to foreign ones. In case, if someone
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gets
monotonous by having the same meal on a daily basis, then he/ she will have an
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option
to eat other dishes from another country or region to
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change
their intake of food.

In contrary, there are
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some
restrictions on the number of
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choices
, which
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people
have in their
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lives
as somewhere it lacks due to
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some
extent such as till
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now
there is no treatment for
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some
medical problems, then how can we say that we have several
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options
these days when they are
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just
limited to
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some
things.

To conclude
, it is
generally
said that nowadays,
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people
have
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many
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options
in terms of various aspects. Folks, do have
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choices
to
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make
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but
they
are limited
to
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some
extent till
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now
, and
hopefully
they should not be there in the future.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people are choosing to find information online rather than in books. Is this development positive or negative? v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
293 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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