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your city has decided to build a statue to honor a famous person in your country who would you choose v.1

your city has decided to build a statue to honor a famous person in your country who would you choose v. 1
Nowadays, there are a lot of statues of famous people in cities and towns. This may remind us to feel grateful for their attempts and good performances in addition to remembering that we have to continue their ways. Each country has its own honorable well-known people. Among all venerable people I have seen in my life, I respect Dr. Chamran more than anybody because of his extraordinary attitudes. First of all, Dr. Chamran was a very brilliant scientist in physics and electrical engineering. Hardships and difficulties could not prevent him from achieving best awards during his short life. Since he was very good at sciences and technology, he motivates me to continue his way and encourages me not to allow hard situations impede me from my goals. For example, he got the best GPA among all electrical engineering students at Texas University and he was appreciated by all faculties. When I feel that I cannot pass TOEFL, I think about him and begin to study again. Moreover, he defended our country during eight-year war and was killed by the enemy. All people who visited him in his life assert that he was one of the bravest people in the world. Although before that time, his responsibilities never exceeded studying and submitting articles, but he could learn military principles very soon and after some months, he became the commander of 5000 soldiers. He did everything for his country and even he lost his life because of our country. Therefore, both of his life and death are admirable and we owe him. Furthermore, he had a romantic relationship with his spouse. After his death, his wife published some of his letters and explained about his good manner. Although he was very courageous in the battle scenes, he was very kind and gentle at home. Not only did not he order to his wife to do something for him but also he helped her in drudgery housekeeping tasks. His wife stated that after his death, she stayed near his grave for one week because she loved him so much. To sum up, Dr. Chamran’s behaviors made him honorable in our society. There is a highway in Tehran which its name is Chamran to show his family that we never forget his good jobs.
Nowadays, there are
a lot of
statues of
famous
people
in cities and towns. This may remind us to feel grateful for their attempts and
good
performances
in addition
to remembering that we
have to
continue their ways. Each
country
has its
own
honorable well-known
people
. Among all venerable
people
I have
seen
in my
life
, I respect Dr.
Chamran
more than anybody
because
of his extraordinary attitudes.

First of all
, Dr.
Chamran
was a
very
brilliant scientist in physics and electrical engineering. Hardships and difficulties could not
prevent
him from achieving best awards during his short
life
. Since he was
very
good
at sciences and technology, he motivates me to continue his way and encourages me not to
allow
hard
situations impede me from my goals.
For example
, he
got
the best GPA among all electrical engineering students at Texas
University and
he
was appreciated
by all faculties. When I feel that I cannot pass TOEFL, I
think
about him and
begin
to study again.

Moreover
, he defended our
country
during eight-year war and
was killed
by the enemy. All
people
who visited him in his
life
assert that he was one of the bravest
people
in the world. Although
before
that time, his responsibilities never exceeded studying and submitting articles,
but
he could learn military principles
very
soon
and after
some
months, he became the commander of 5000 soldiers. He did everything for his
country
and even he lost his
life
because
of our
country
.
Therefore
, both of his
life
and death are
admirable and
we owe him.

Furthermore
, he had a romantic relationship with his spouse. After his death, his wife published
some
of his letters and
explained
about his
good
manner. Although he was
very
courageous in the battle scenes, he was
very
kind and gentle at home. Not
only
did not he
order
to his wife to do something for him
but
also
he
helped
her in drudgery housekeeping tasks. His wife stated that after his death, she stayed near his grave for one week
because
she
loved
him
so
much.

To sum up, Dr.
Chamran
’s behaviors made him honorable in our society. There is a highway in Tehran which its name is
Chamran
to
show
his family that we never forget his
good
jobs.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay your city has decided to build a statue to honor a famous person in your country who would you choose v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
380 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
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