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Do you Agree with the statement? The most important things in life are not learnt at school or college. Use examples and details in your answer. v.2

The most important things in life are not learnt at school or college. Use examples and details in your answer. v. 2
We live in a fascinating and constantly changing world, and we must continually learn and acquire new knowledge if we are to adapt and keep up with changing events. I personally agree with the statement that the most important things in life are not learnt at school or college. There are a few reasons why I fee this way. One of the reasons is that some people move to other locations to live, and this way, it can be pivotal to obtain new knowledge. Different environment may require possessing of new skills. For instance, if a person moves to a new country, he is likely to learn a language, which he never spoke before. Therefore, the person has to develop new abilities in order to fit in the new society and work with those around him. If in the such as circumstances the person is not willing to gain language skills, he is likely to be out of the social life. Although, a myriad of new residents can enroll in a community, which speaks their native language, it is doubtful that they will be able to find an advantageous job without speaking the language of the new country. To that end, changing of place in the world to live in, most of the time, stimulates people to learn new crucial things. Another reason is that technological progress makes people to study continually. Tremendous amount of modern computer programs has been evolving every day. Moreover, in case to succeed in contemporary business setting, people must to be aware of all the new trends and innovations in this field. When a person ceases to develop his skills, his career can be threatened by substituting him by a more knowledgeable employee. Indeed, nowadays it is crucial to attend new educational courses to keep up with the fast developing technology. So, the basic education obtained at school or collage is not enough to bring a person to the top and excel. To sum it up, I feel that the most important things in life people continue learning after school and college. This is because life conditions change all the time. All things considered, it is reasonable to assume that it is never late to learn.
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in a fascinating and
constantly
changing world, and we
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must
continually
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learn
and acquire
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new
knowledge if we are to adapt and
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keep
up with changing
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events
. I
personally
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agree
with the statement that the most
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important
things in
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life
are not
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learnt at
school or college. There are a few reasons why I fee this way.

One of the reasons is that
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some
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people
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move
to other locations to
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live
, and this way, it can be pivotal to obtain
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new
knowledge.
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Different
environment may require possessing of
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new
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skills
.
For instance
, if a
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person
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moves
to a
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new
country, he is likely to
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learn
a
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language
, which he never spoke
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before
.
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, the
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person
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has to
develop
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new
abilities in order to fit in the
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new
society and work with those around him. If in the such as circumstances the
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person
is not willing to gain
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language
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skills
, he is likely to be out of the social
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life
. Although, a myriad of
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new
residents can enroll in a community, which speaks their native
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language
, it is doubtful that they will be able to find an advantageous job without speaking the
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language
of the
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new
country. To that
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end
, changing of place in the world to
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live
in, most of the time, stimulates
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people
to
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learn
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new
crucial things.

Another reason is that technological progress
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makes
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people
to study
continually
. Tremendous amount of modern computer programs has been evolving every day.
Moreover
, in case to succeed in contemporary business setting,
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people
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must to
be aware of all the
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new
trends and innovations in this field. When a
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person
ceases to develop his
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skills
, his career can
be threatened
by substituting him by a more knowledgeable employee.
Indeed
, nowadays it is crucial to attend
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new
educational courses to
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keep
up with the
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fast
developing technology.
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So
, the basic education obtained at school or collage is not
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enough
to bring a
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person
to the top and excel.

To sum it up, I feel that the most
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important
things in
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life
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people
continue learning after school and college. This is
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because
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life
conditions
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change
all the time. All things considered, it is reasonable to assume that it is never late to
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learn
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay The most important things in life are not learnt at school or college. Use examples and details in your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
371 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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