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Your city has decided to build a statue or monument to honour a famous person in your country. Whom would you choose? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice. v.2

Your city has decided to build a statue or monument to honour a famous person in your country. Whom would you choose? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice. v. 2
Nowadays there are lots of statues and monuments to honour people in cities which can remind us to feel grateful for what they may have done to our country and society. In France many personalities come to my mind, such as Charles de Gaulle, Victor Hugo, Molière or Simone Veil. If I had to decide whom would my city build, I would choose Simone Weil. This essay will further discuss reasons to support my choice. Firstly, her life needs to be known to understand why she is the perfect famous people for our statue or monument. She was a young Jewish girl during WWII and she survived the Shoah and the death camps, which yet shows how strong she was even during her teenage years. WWI and WWII have affected every French, in this respect, a survivor from this period is always a good choice of statue. However, surviving the holocaust is not even close to her only action! She was a huge help to the independence of women in France and thanks to her, women get the chance to abort legally. From a feminism point of view, this makes Simone Veil the perfect figure of the political French scene. On top of that, she was elected as the first woman president of the European Parliament. She was the one who prepared Europe for the entry of ex-communism countries and who helped Europe to be known by more people. To conclude, I strongly believe that Simone Veil is the perfect person who can be chosen to get a statue or a monument erected. In addition to her contribution to improve women conditions, she was a huge actor in the European development. As she died 1 year and a half ago, this would be a great reminder for all what she did for France.
Nowadays there are lots of statues and monuments to
honour
people
in cities which can remind us to feel grateful for what they may have done to our country and society. In France
many
personalities
come
to my mind, such as Charles de Gaulle, Victor Hugo, Molière or Simone Veil. If I had to decide whom would my city build, I would choose Simone
Weil
. This essay will
further
discuss reasons to support my choice.

Firstly
, her life needs to
be known
to understand why she is the perfect
famous
people
for our statue or monument. She was a young Jewish girl during
WWII and
she survived the Shoah and the death camps, which
yet
shows
how strong she was even during her teenage years. WWI and WWII have
affected
every French, in this respect, a survivor from this period is always a
good
choice of statue.

However
, surviving the holocaust is not even close to her
only
action! She was a huge
help
to the independence of women in France and thanks to her, women
get
the chance to abort
legally
. From a feminism point of view, this
makes
Simone Veil the perfect figure of the political French scene.

On top of that
, she
was elected
as the
first
woman
president of the European Parliament. She was the one who prepared Europe for the entry of ex-communism countries and who
helped
Europe to
be known
by more
people
.

To conclude
, I
strongly
believe that Simone Veil is the perfect person who can
be chosen
to
get
a statue or a monument erected.
In addition
to her contribution to
improve
women conditions, she was a huge actor in the European development. As she
died
1 year and a half ago, this would be a great reminder for all what she did for France.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Your city has decided to build a statue or monument to honour a famous person in your country. Whom would you choose? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
303 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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