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Young people spend much of their free time on shopping malls. It has negativeeffects in both young people and the society that they live in. To what extent do youagree or disagree? v.1

Young people spend much of their free time on shopping malls. It has negativeeffects in both young people and the society that they live in. v. 1
The energy, which is produced by wind and solar, is more beneficial and less harmful as compare to the energy, which is produced by coal, oil and gas. There are several reasons to proof that, this is positive development rather than negative development. For example, carbon emission is the main drawback of the coals, oil and gas. The energy is our necessity to deal with our daily household activities; therefore, it should be cheap and easily accessible. Yet, a rich natural resource country can make the energy cheaply with these minerals, but she has to bear the cost of air and other pollutions. Moreover, these are not renewable and can be used for once. For example, if these resources are vanished from the earth, then our new generation cannot use it in the future, which will make this energy source more expensive. On the other side of the picture, wind and solar are sustainable sources of the energy production and these are not harmful for the environment. Thus, these are useful for everyone. To get energy from wind, solar and water dam, government or individual need to bear expense just for once, after that they can enjoy the fruit in their whole life. Moreover, these are renewable resources, but there is a problem that wind and solar setup can only be established at the suitable places. To sum up the arguments, wind and solar are suitable according to the weather conditions of the places, but these are more acceptable resources as compared to others, because these do not create the any type of pollution in the environment.
The
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, which
is produced
by
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wind
and
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solar
, is more beneficial and less harmful as compare to the
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energy
, which
is produced
by coal, oil and gas. There are several reasons to proof that, this is
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positive
development
rather
than
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negative
development.
For example
, carbon emission is the main drawback of the coals, oil and gas.

The
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energy
is our necessity to deal with our daily household activities;
therefore
, it should be
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cheap
and
easily
accessible.
Yet
, a rich natural
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resource
country can
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make
the
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energy
cheaply
with these minerals,
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but
she
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has to
bear the cost of air and other pollutions.
Moreover
, these are not renewable and can be
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used
for once.
For example
, if these resources
are vanished
from the earth, then our new generation cannot
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use
it in the future, which will
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make
this
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energy
source more expensive.

On the other side of the picture,
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wind
and
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solar
are sustainable sources of the
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energy
production and these are not harmful for the environment.
Thus
, these are useful for everyone. To
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get
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energy
from
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wind
,
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solar
and water dam,
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government
or individual need to bear expense
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just
for once, after that they can enjoy the fruit in their whole life.
Moreover
, these are renewable resources,
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but
there is a problem that
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wind
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
solar
setup can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be established
at the suitable places.

To sum up the arguments,
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wind
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
solar
are suitable according to the weather conditions of the places,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
these are more acceptable resources as compared to others,
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because
these do not create the any type of pollution in the environment.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Young people spend much of their free time on shopping malls. It has negativeeffects in both young people and the society that they live in. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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