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It is better to take a secure job with a low pay than to take a job with a high pay but is easy to lose v.1

It is better to take a secure job with a low pay than to take a job with a high pay but is easy to lose v. 1
The ways of improvement in transport are debated with one opinion supporting major investments in establishing new rail line infrastructure while other favours uplifting of the present public transport. In my opinion funding the railway line construction looks more helpful. Developing the new track lines between the cities and towns helps the masses in large number. With increasing population and communication, more trains are required for travelling between towns and cities. Trains have a capacity much more than any other single mode of transportation. It can carry a large number of passengers in one trip and because of fewer and fixed stop points it takes lesser time to cover a distance. Consequently, cost and time are reduced which are very important factors of daily life. Moreover, rail travel is more comfortable with variable and spacious seating plan and availability of other life amenities like washrooms. Ultimately, people prefer it as a mode of travelling so construction of new lines will be of great help in solving transportation issues. Recently Saudi Arabia has established a train line between Madina and Makkah to cope with the large flux of pilgrims between these cities. On the other hand, investment in the already present means of travelling like roads and buses, is supported as they require lesser money and provide facilities to a broad range of travel. Improving road by widening, fencing and carpeting helps to accommodate more movement and the relative cost as compared to new rail line lines is smaller. In addition, vast road infrastructures are meant for all kinds of road service, both public or private and there is no limit of stops and destinations. Pakistan is extending of its motorways across the countries with 10 plans. I think spending money on railways looks more fruitful as it is a promising travel facility. With the availability of bullet trains, with modern facilities and more safety measures, it attracts more travellers making the rail more utilised mean. In summary, both rail transport and other means have their charms and requirements for attracting funds, but I support investing in railways.
The ways of improvement in transport
are debated
with one opinion supporting major investments in establishing
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new
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rail
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line
infrastructure while
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other
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favours
uplifting of the present public transport. In my opinion funding the railway
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line
construction looks more helpful.

Developing the
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new
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track
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lines
between the cities and towns
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helps
the masses in large number. With increasing population and communication, more
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trains
are required
for travelling between towns and cities.
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Trains
have a capacity much more than any
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other
single mode of transportation. It can carry
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a large number of
passengers in one trip and
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because
of fewer and
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fixed
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stop
points it takes lesser time to cover a distance.
Consequently
, cost and time are
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reduced
which are
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very
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important
factors of daily life.
Moreover
,
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rail
travel is more comfortable with variable and spacious seating plan and availability of
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other
life amenities like washrooms.
Ultimately
,
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people
prefer it as a mode of travelling
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so
construction of
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new
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lines
will be of great
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help
in solving transportation issues. Recently Saudi Arabia has established a
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train
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line
between
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Madina
and
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Makkah
to cope with the large flux of pilgrims between these cities.

On the
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other
hand, investment in the already present means of travelling like
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roads
and buses,
is supported
as they require lesser money and provide facilities to a broad range of travel. Improving
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road
by widening, fencing and carpeting
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helps
to accommodate more movement and the relative cost as compared to
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new
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rail
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line
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lines
is smaller.
In addition
, vast
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road
infrastructures
are meant
for all kinds of
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road
service, both public or private and there is no limit of
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stops
and destinations. Pakistan is extending of its motorways across the countries with 10 plans.

I
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think
spending money on railways looks more fruitful as it is a promising travel facility. With the availability of bullet
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trains
, with modern facilities and more safety measures, it attracts more
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travellers
making the
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rail
more
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utilised
mean.

In summary, both
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transport and
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other
means have their charms and requirements for attracting funds,
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but
I support investing in railways.
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IELTS essay It is better to take a secure job with a low pay than to take a job with a high pay but is easy to lose v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
347 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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