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You would like to invite before and friend to visit you for your birthday write a letter inviting your friends Tell your friend about your birthdayExplain how much the visit would mean to youSuggest that your friend stays at your house for the visit v.1

You would like to invite before and friend to visit you for your birthday write a letter inviting your friends Tell your friend about your birthdayExplain how much the visit would mean to youSuggest that your friend stays at your house for the visit v. 1
Technological advancements are tremendously increasing worldwide. In this modern era, electronic devices such as mobile phones, iPod are reducing the social interactions among people. I disagree with this statement because it is the only device which combines many people and increases better interaction worldwide. It is not undeniable that mobile phones have had an adverse effect on social interaction. Many people are uniting and even improving better interaction with the help of mobile phones. For instance, people who live overseas or any other country apart from their hometown mobile is the best way to get in touch with their family and friends. In the past, it could not be possible to communicate frequently however this situation has completely changed only with the help of mobiles. Another reason why I disagree with this statement is mobile devices also bringing a plethora of knowledge about other culture and tradition. For instance, if a person wants to understand the unknown culture he/she can use any of the following apps such as Facebook, Instagram to acquire the information from a particular person. Moreover, it also develops a good relationship with people who live in some other country. If people face any emergency situation in their life, they can immediately convey the situation and as a result, many people come forward to contribute based on their background. In conclusion, mobile phones have not lessened social interactions, they have merely changed the way of interaction in a positive way and increasing the good relationship among individuals.
Technological advancements are
tremendously
increasing worldwide. In this modern era, electronic devices such as mobile
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phones
, iPod are reducing the social
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interactions
among
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people
. I disagree with this statement
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because
it is the
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only
device which combines
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many
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people
and increases better
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interaction
worldwide.

It is not undeniable that mobile
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phones
have had an adverse effect on social
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interaction
.
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Many
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people
are uniting and even improving better
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interaction
with the
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help
of mobile
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phones
.
For instance
,
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people
who
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live
overseas or any other country apart from their hometown mobile is the best way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
in touch with their family and friends. In the past, it could not be possible to communicate
frequently
however
this situation has completely
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changed
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only
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of mobiles.

Another reason why I disagree with this statement is mobile devices
also
bringing a plethora of knowledge about other culture and tradition.
For instance
, if a person wants to understand the unknown culture he/she can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
any of the following apps such as Facebook, Instagram to acquire the information from a particular person.
Moreover
, it
also
develops a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
relationship with
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people
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in
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some
other country. If
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people
face any emergency situation in their life, they can immediately convey the situation and
as a result
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
forward to contribute based on their background.

In conclusion
, mobile
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phones
have not lessened social
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interactions
, they have
merely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
the way of
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interaction
in a
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positive
way and increasing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
relationship among individuals.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay You would like to invite before and friend to visit you for your birthday write a letter inviting your friends Tell your friend about your birthdayExplain how much the visit would mean to youSuggest that your friend stays at your house for the visit v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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