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You recently stayed in a hotel large City was very unusual for the time of the year and the heating cooling system in the hotel was quite indicateGive detail What was wrong what you had to do for overcomeSay what action you would like the manage to hotel v.1

You recently stayed in a hotel large City was very unusual for the time of the year and the heating cooling system in the hotel was quite indicateGive detail What was wrong what you had to do for overcomeSay what action you would like the manage to hotel v. 1
Some people think that they were happy in their childhood, whereas others hold a view that the adulthood is the best time. In my opinion, while teenage gives the freedom from responsibilities, but leaving the age of adult make a person aware from the up and downs of life. On the one hand, it is irrefutable that children have less burden and duties as compared to younger ones. The mind of a child is free from all worries because the onus lies with their parents. For instance, juveniles do not have a tension of earning bread for the family and doing home tasks, which are considered to be the big issues of life. Moreover, they can play outside the home with the peers and can pester the guardians if they want anything. Thus, this phase is considered as the happiest period of existence. On the other hand, individuals who assert that the adult life as well is just because, the grown ups have the liberty of taking important decisions of their life. In addition, they do not have the pressure of studies, since till this age mostly people settle down in their career. In fact, they are not bound to go anywhere. For example, in my country the entertainment clubs or movie theatres do not allow the entry of the masses who are under the age of 18. Thus, in order to enjoy all the aspects of life, the adult period is also the crucial one. To conclude, while adolescents have freedom from all worries of life, but adult periods have its own advantages.
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that they were happy in their childhood, whereas others hold a view that the adulthood is the best time. In my opinion, while teenage gives the freedom from responsibilities,
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but
leaving the age of adult
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a person aware from the up and downs of life.

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because
the onus lies with their parents.
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, juveniles do not have a tension of earning bread for the family and doing home tasks, which
are considered
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big
issues of
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life
.
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, they can play outside the home with the peers and can pester the guardians if they want anything.
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, this phase
is considered
as the happiest period of existence.

On the other hand
, individuals who assert that the adult
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life
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grown ups
have the liberty of taking
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important
decisions of their
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life
.
In addition
, they do not have the pressure of studies, since till this age
mostly
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people
settle down in their career. In fact, they are not bound to go anywhere.
For example
, in my country the entertainment clubs or movie
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theatres
do not
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allow
the entry of the masses who are under the age of 18.
Thus
, in order to enjoy all the aspects of
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life
, the adult period is
also
the crucial one.

To conclude
, while adolescents have freedom from all worries of
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life
,
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but
adult periods have its
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own
advantages.
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IELTS essay You recently stayed in a hotel large City was very unusual for the time of the year and the heating cooling system in the hotel was quite indicateGive detail What was wrong what you had to do for overcomeSay what action you would like the manage to hotel v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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