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Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.11

Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. v. 11
Reading news on the internet or newspaper for major people have been a heated topic constantly. There is a common notion that newspapers are still the most vital source and this trend will continue. I disagree with the assertion. At the outset, The usage of newspapers has witnessed an undeniable decline in recent decades. The internet has many advantages that newspapers do not. First and foremost, it is salient points to consider that every newspaper article can be found online. Each media service, for instance, the BBC and The New York Times have their own website in which they post all the latest news. People every corner of the world can access the internet easily. To illustrate, is finding hundreds of online resources to know what is happening around them, many of them have lost interest in reading newspapers. Additionally, if an individual looking for something that they have in mind, they can simply type whatever topic and find millions of articles on that topic and share them with their friends. Moreover, from my perspective, the older generation would rather unfamiliar with latest technological advancement or never want to change their traditional way of reading the news. Hence, they still prefer to read the current news through the magazines. Despite, the most people have a hectic schedule, so they have not enough time in order to read newspapers. One vivid example of this is that when humans want to read newspapers, they should spend a plethora of time. To be more specific, they cannot waste their time and cost for press which is published only once a day or even a week. All the aforementioned points lead me to a firm conclusion that it is foreseeable that the internet might replace newspapers in the near future. It is also safe and people as well as choosing better and cheaper options to spend their money on if they so desire.
Reading
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news
on the internet or
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newspaper
for major
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people
have been a heated topic
constantly
. There is a common notion that
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newspapers
are
still
the most vital source and this trend will continue. I disagree with the assertion.

At the outset, The usage of
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newspapers
has witnessed an undeniable decline in recent decades. The internet has
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many
advantages that
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newspapers
do not.
First
and foremost, it is salient points to consider that every
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newspaper
article can
be found
online. Each media service,
for instance
, the BBC and The
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New
York
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Times
have their
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own
website in which they post all the latest
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news
.
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People
every corner of the world can access the internet
easily
. To illustrate, is finding hundreds of online resources to know what is happening around them,
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many
of them have lost interest in reading
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newspapers
.
Additionally
, if an individual looking for something that they have in mind, they can
simply
type whatever topic and find millions of articles on that topic and share them with their friends.

Moreover
, from my perspective, the older generation would
rather
unfamiliar with
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latest
technological advancement or never want to
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change
their traditional way of reading the
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news
.
Hence
, they
still
prefer to read the
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current
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news
through the magazines. Despite, the most
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people
have a hectic schedule,
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so
they have not
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enough
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time
in order to read
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newspapers
. One vivid example of this is that when humans want to read
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newspapers
, they should spend a plethora of
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time
. To be more specific, they cannot waste their
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time
and cost for press which
is published
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
once a day or even a week.

All the aforementioned points lead me to a firm conclusion that it is foreseeable that the internet might replace
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newspapers
in the near future. It is
also
safe and
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people
as well
as choosing better and cheaper options to spend their money on if they
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so
desire.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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