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You have recently moved into a new house. You want to tell your friend about your good news. Write to your friend. In the letter: • Describe the house. • Describe the neighbourhood. • Invite your friend to come and see the house. v.2

You have recently moved into a new house. You want to tell your friend about your good news. Write to your friend. In the letter: • Describe the house. • Describe the neighbourhood. • Invite your friend to come and see the house. v. 2
Dear John, I’m writing this letter to tell you about the house to which our family moved-in recently. You know that I got a job offer in Bangalore so our family shifted here last month. The house we moved-in is quite close to where I work. It’s an independent house with 2 floors. We stay in the ground floor which is a 2 bedroom house and the first floor is a duplex-ed 3 bedroom portion. The house is quite spacious and we could fit-in all the big furniture we bought with us. There is a parking spot to keep your 2 wheeler within the compound, where I park my bicycle. The neighbourhood is also quite good, with lot of Tamil families around. The convenience store is just a walk away and grocery store is also quite close from our house. The house is just a 200 feet away from the bus stop so it’s a very convenient to find a bus to bus stand or railway station whenever you want. Our stay here won’t be complete without you visiting us. I’m free in all the weekends next month. Please come to our home with your brother and we can go to a movie in mall which also not far from our house. I am expecting your reply on the letter, more than that I am expecting your arrival soon. Awaiting your response. With Love, Bala
Dear John,

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tell
you about the
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house
to which our family
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moved
-in recently. You know that I
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got
a job offer in Bangalore
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so
our family shifted here last month.

The
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house
we
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moved
-in is
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quite
close to where I work. It’s an independent
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house
with 2 floors. We stay in the
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ground floor
which is a
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2 bedroom
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house
and the
first
floor is a duplex-ed 3 bedroom portion. The
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house
is
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quite
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spacious and
we could fit-in all the
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big
furniture we
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bought
with us. There is a parking spot to
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keep
your 2 wheeler within the compound, where I park my bicycle.

The
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neighbourhood
is
also
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quite
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good
, with
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lot of
Tamil families around. The convenience store is
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just
a walk away and grocery store is
also
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quite
close from our
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house
.
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The
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house
is
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just
a
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200 feet
away from the bus
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stop
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so
it’s a
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very
convenient to find a bus to bus stand or railway station whenever you want.

Our stay here won’t be complete without you visiting us. I’m free in all the weekends
next
month.
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Please
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come
to our home with your
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
brother and
we can go to a movie in mall which
also
not far from our
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house
. I am expecting your reply on the letter, more than that I am expecting your arrival
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soon
. Awaiting your response.

With
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Love
,

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Bala
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay You have recently moved into a new house. You want to tell your friend about your good news. Write to your friend. In the letter: • Describe the house. • Describe the neighbourhood. • Invite your friend to come and see the house. v. 2

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
234 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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