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You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods v.1

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods v. 1
The government should motivate individuals to include healthy food by taxing junk food. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this statement. This essay will discuss the reasons for my opinion. One reason an increase in tax will not discourage people from eating unhealthy food is because many individuals are time-poor. Most healthy foods require time to prepare, from the purchasing of the ingredients to the actual preparation of the food and these processes consumes time, which individuals cannot afford, especially the people with full-time jobs. For instance, a recent survey done in England showed that one-third of individuals would rather buy junk because they cannot afford to set apart time to cook. As a result, they prefer buying and eating junk food which is ready made and can be eaten on the move. Another reason a higher tariff will not discourage people from eating unhealthy food is addictive. Some individuals are addicted to eating junk and just like cigarette addiction, they need a daily dose of unhealthy diet to function, without which they shut down. An example of persons in this category is my younger brother, who although was diabetic, ate only foods that were detrimental to his health, even with his doctor's advice on which meals to avoid. This went on, until his psychologist diagnosed him as addicted to unhealthy meals. Hence, it is clear from this example that some persons will not be discouraged from consuming unhealthy foods because of an increase in tariffs. In conclusion, I maintain the view that an increase in tax will not encourage people to consume healthier food options for reasons discussed in this essay.
The
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government
should motivate
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individuals
to include healthy
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food
by taxing
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junk
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food
. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this statement. This essay will discuss the
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reasons
for my opinion.

One
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reason
an increase in tax will not discourage
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people
from
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eating
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unhealthy
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food
is
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because
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many
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individuals
are time-poor. Most healthy
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foods
require time to prepare, from the purchasing of the ingredients to the actual preparation of the
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food
and these processes consumes time, which
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individuals
cannot afford,
especially
the
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people
with full-time jobs.
For instance
, a recent survey done in England
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showed
that one-third of
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individuals
would
rather
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buy
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junk
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because
they cannot afford to set apart time to cook.
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, they prefer buying and
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eating
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junk
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food
which is
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ready made
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be eaten
on the
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move
.

Another
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reason
a higher tariff will not discourage
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people
from
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eating
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unhealthy
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food
is addictive.
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Some
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individuals
are addicted
to
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eating
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junk
and
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just
like cigarette addiction, they need a daily dose of
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unhealthy
diet to function, without which they shut down. An example of persons in this category is my younger brother, who although was diabetic, ate
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only
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foods
that were detrimental to his health, even with his doctor's advice on which meals to avoid. This went on, until his psychologist diagnosed him as addicted to
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unhealthy
meals.
Hence
, it is
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clear
from this example that
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some
persons will not
be discouraged
from consuming
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unhealthy
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foods
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because
of an increase in tariffs.

In conclusion
, I maintain the view that an increase in tax will not encourage
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people
to consume healthier
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food
options for
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reasons
discussed in this essay.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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