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You have just rented an unfurnished flat and a friend has told you that the Opportunity Shop in the shopping center has cheap second-hand furniture. Write to the shop owner. In your letter•Describe what you need•Ask whether they have these items•Wha v.1

You have just rented an unfurnished flat and a friend has told you that the Opportunity Shop in the shopping center has cheap second-hand furniture. Write to the shop owner. In your letter•Describe what you need•Ask whether they have these items•Wha v. 1
Flight journey, which was a luxury once, has become an affordable commodity, at least to most of the middle classed people, due to which many are opting to spend vacations in foreign countries rather than their own. I shall examine both positive and negative shades of this in the following paragraphs. There are two main advantages of foreign tours. Firstly, the tourism of the country is promoted. The question is how? It is a well-known fact that advertising through word of mouth has more impact, hence, if more tourists visit; more and accurate information is spread across the world about the place, eventually resulting in more visitors. Secondly, aspirants who had only visualised far distant places virtually can now go and see them physically. The world is really becoming small. There are also some disadvantages which we must not ignore. First one is, with people looking out for more holidays in abroad, the local travel business is diminishing. And the other is, due to higher frequencies of the flights between the countries, the possibility of causing pollution is also at rise. This may result in a greater impact on our environment, especially on ozone layer; not now but in the forthcoming days. In conclusion, one cannot deny the fact that the reduction in air fare has definitely brought in greater fortunes for holiday-business industry and made the world tiny for travellers, but, we must also not forget the repercussions it brings in with respect to the environment and regional tourism.
Flight journey, which was a luxury once, has become an affordable commodity, at least to most of the middle classed
people
, due to which
many
are opting to spend vacations in foreign countries
rather
than their
own
. I shall examine both
positive
and
negative
shades of this in the following paragraphs.

There are two main advantages of foreign tours.
Firstly
, the tourism of the country
is promoted
. The question is how?
It is a well-known fact that
advertising through word of mouth has more impact,
hence
, if more tourists visit; more and accurate information
is spread
across the world about the place,
eventually
resulting in more visitors.
Secondly
, aspirants who had
only
visualised
far distant places
virtually
can
now
go and
see
them
physically
. The world is
really
becoming
small
.

There are
also
some
disadvantages which we
must
not
ignore
.
First
one is, with
people
looking out for more holidays in abroad, the local travel business is diminishing. And the other is, due to higher frequencies of the flights between the countries, the possibility of causing pollution is
also
at rise. This may result in a greater impact on our environment,
especially
on ozone layer; not
now
but
in the forthcoming days.

In conclusion
, one cannot deny the fact that the reduction in air fare has definitely brought in greater fortunes for holiday-business industry and made the world tiny for
travellers
,
but
, we
must
also
not forget the repercussions it brings in with respect to the environment and regional tourism.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You have just rented an unfurnished flat and a friend has told you that the Opportunity Shop in the shopping center has cheap second-hand furniture. Write to the shop owner. In your letter•Describe what you need•Ask whether they have these items•Wha v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
7.5
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