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Necessity Goods and Veblen GoodsWhen the price of a good increases, consumers typically buy less of it. Yet two types of goods donot follow this pattern. Necessity goods are products that people always buy, even when prices rise. Consumers purchase necessi v.1

Necessity Goods and Veblen GoodsWhen the price of a good increases, consumers typically buy less of it. Yet two types of goods donot follow this pattern. Necessity goods are products that people always buy, even when prices rise. Consumers purchase necessi v. 1
Students could do well in schools if they are appreciated instead of penalizing every time, but to some extent, in my opinion, you cannot just let children do whatever they want, it could make them a stubborn and disobedient child. However, some think that a student should be given complete liberty and some do not. Firstly, punishment does not only mean beating a child or giving severe punishment, but it could also be in a mild way because if children do not have fear of anything they may become wayward students and would listen to no none, would do whatever they like to, even if it is bad stuff. In support of the statement, most of the students in the USA do not go to college after high school, and it is a report shown by their government and I believe that it is due to their rule that no one could punish a student there. Secondly, some children are so intolerable that they do the wrong things even if you make them clearly understand. In those instances, I have a view that there should be a piece of advice given to them and even if they do not understand, they should look for the punishment because it is in their future if they are not made a good person, they could choose a wrong path in their life like what is happening in the Middle East countries, where terror is all around due to a lack of guidance given to the people when they were children. In conclusion, Although punishments could look a brutal act, but if it is done in a different way like to extract out something good for a child then it could result in a better way for a child. Hence, I am in favour of at least a little form of punishments.
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Students
could do well in schools if they
are appreciated
instead
of penalizing every time,
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but
to
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some
extent, in my opinion, you cannot
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just
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let
children do whatever they want, it could
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make
them a stubborn and disobedient
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child
.
However
,
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some
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think
that a
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student
should be
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given
complete liberty and
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some
do not.

Firstly
,
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punishment
does not
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only
mean beating a
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child
or giving severe
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punishment
,
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but
it could
also
be
Consider replacing "in a mild way" with the adverb for "mild"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a mild way
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because
if children do not have fear of anything they may become wayward
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students
and would listen to no none, would do whatever they like to, even if it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
stuff. In support of the statement, most of the
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students
in the USA do not go to college after high school, and it is a report shown by their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and I believe that it is due to their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rule
that no one could punish a
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student
there.

Secondly
,
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some
children are
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so
intolerable that they do the
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wrong
things even if you
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make
them
clearly
understand. In those instances, I have a view that there should be a piece of advice
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to them and even if they do not understand, they should look for the
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punishment
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because
it is in their future if they are not made a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
person, they could choose a
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wrong
path in their life like what is happening in the Middle East countries, where terror is all around due to a lack of guidance
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
when they were children.

In conclusion
, Although
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punishments
could look a brutal act,
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but
if it
is done
in a
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different
way like to extract out something
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for a
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child
then it could result in a better way for a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
child
.
Hence
, I am in
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
of at least a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
form of
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punishments
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Necessity Goods and Veblen GoodsWhen the price of a good increases, consumers typically buy less of it. Yet two types of goods donot follow this pattern. Necessity goods are products that people always buy, even when prices rise. Consumers purchase necessi v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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