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You would like a temporary job working in a summer camp which runs sports and outdoor activities for children and young people next summer Write a letter to the organizers of the summer camp In your letter Explain what sort of job you would like to do Des v.1

You would like a temporary job working in a summer camp which runs sports and outdoor activities for children and young people next summer Write a letter to the organizers of the summer camp In your letter Explain what sort of job you would like to do Des v. 1
Respect should be the most important thing in everyone's life. Nowadays, person value be condemned by their social life and property, even though old fashioned conscience is no longer in most people life. In my perspective, I completely agree with this statement. Firstly, this happens due to the technology, especially social media, those thing developing this concept in society. Social media play the main role in our life. If we are watching films about envied, we are starting to follow that habit in our day to day life. Following those bad habits in our life we lost valuable habit such as respect others, loving our family members. There some film and drama that provides envied, enmity. For instance, Iceman this film about anonymity that who is coming after 400 to avenge his friend. Secondly, everyone wants to be famous in society because of this reason people find some bad way to be famous such as doing some YouTube channels, blogs. Although most of teenagers doing some silly experiment in Facebook and YouTube. While they are doing such things they are irreverent others. Moreover, people like to watch such experiment. We respect those people who doing a YouTube channel than people who doing good works to the society. For example, People respect Youtubers such as ace family more than Doctors, Teachers. When we show Youtubers in public places we attempted to take some photos with them. In conclusion, people care more about what others think about their social status than what others think about their personality. I think we should respect all kinds of people.
Respect
should be the most
important
thing in everyone's life.

Nowadays, person value
be condemned
by their
social
life
and property,
even though
old fashioned
conscience is no longer in most
people
life
. In my perspective, I completely
agree
with this statement.

Firstly
, this happens due to the technology,
especially
social
media,
those thing
developing this concept in society.
Social
media play the main role in our
life
. If we are watching films about envied, we are starting to follow that habit in our
day to day
life
. Following those
bad
habits in our
life
we lost valuable habit such as
respect
others, loving our family members. There
some
film and drama that provides envied, enmity.
For instance
, Iceman this film about anonymity that who is coming after 400 to avenge his friend.

Secondly
, everyone wants to be
famous
in society
because of this
reason
people
find
some
bad
way to be
famous
such as
doing
some
YouTube channels, blogs. Although most of
teenagers
doing
some
silly experiment
in Facebook
and YouTube.
While
they are
doing
such things they are irreverent others.
Moreover
,
people
like to
watch
such experiment. We
respect
those
people
who
doing
a YouTube channel than
people
who
doing
good
works to the society.
For example
,
People
respect
Youtubers
such as ace family more than Doctors, Teachers.
When
we
show
Youtubers
in public places we attempted to take
some
photos with them.

In conclusion
,
people
care more about what others
think
about their
social
status than what others
think
about their personality. I
think
we should
respect
all kinds of
people
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay You would like a temporary job working in a summer camp which runs sports and outdoor activities for children and young people next summer Write a letter to the organizers of the summer camp In your letter Explain what sort of job you would like to do Des v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
264 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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