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1667 what you do in your spare time. do you have any hobbies or interests? well, i love to do lots of things in my spare time. like playing online games chatting with my friends watching movies playing cricket outside with my team sometimes i prefer outing v.2

1667 what you do in your spare time. do you have any hobbies or interests? well, i love to do lots of things in my spare time. like playing online games chatting with my friends watching movies playing cricket outside with my team sometimes i prefer outing v. 2
The metropolitan cities of the world are becoming unmanageable due to the insane increase of population. There is a myth that government move factories to newly build industrial zones to reduce the load from mega cities. While, this plan may look good on paper, but it will be very hard to execute. In this essay I will discuss why it is ultimately not for the best. People from remote areas, come to large cities for higher studies and building their careers. Although, this inflow overloads main cities, but they also provide skill and labour for the businesses. However, this spurs a debate that government should move already established businesses to the regional hub. This plan will not only create new avenues for big companies, but provide job opportunities for people of remote areas. For instance, Pakistan has established a new industrial zone in Gawadar which is a new sea port area, and authorities are providing incentives and facilities to attract business. Therefore this will attract businesses to establish in that region. Certainly, moving businesses to regional hubs and dismantling already installed and working factories will make no sense. Although, it will not only have a cost of no production for a long period of time, but there is also a chance of damaged equipment during this process. In addition to that workers will lose jobs who are settling into that particular area for that very job. Moving all the workers and their families will never be a practical idea. Therefore, moving already established businesses in any place will not be a good idea. In conclusion, although, government may facilitate and give incentives to large companies to extend or establish new business in regional hubs, but it is absolutely imperative that moving already established concerns will not be feasible.
The metropolitan
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of the world are becoming unmanageable due to the insane increase of population. There is a myth that
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government
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move
factories to
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build industrial zones to
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reduce
the load from mega
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cities
. While, this plan may look
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good
on paper,
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but
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very
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hard
to execute. In this essay I will discuss why it is
ultimately
not for the best.

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People
from remote
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areas
,
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come
to large
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cities
for higher studies and building their careers. Although, this inflow overloads main
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cities
,
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but
they
also
provide
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skill
and
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businesses
.
However
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government
should
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move
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already
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established
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businesses
to the regional hub. This plan will not
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create
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new
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big
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companies
,
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provide job opportunities for
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people
of remote
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areas
.
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, Pakistan has
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established
a
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new
industrial zone in
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Gawadar
which is a
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new
sea port
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area
, and authorities are providing incentives and facilities to attract
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business
.
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Therefore
this will attract
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businesses
to establish in that region.

Certainly
,
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moving
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businesses
to regional hubs and dismantling
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already
installed and working factories will
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make
no sense. Although, it will not
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have a cost of no production for a long period of time,
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but
there is
also
a chance of damaged equipment during this process.
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to that workers will lose jobs who are settling into that particular
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area
for that
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job.
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all the workers and their families will never be a practical
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idea
.
Therefore
,
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moving
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already
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established
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businesses
in any place will not be a
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good
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idea
.

In conclusion
, although,
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may facilitate and give incentives to large
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companies
to extend or establish
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new
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business
in regional hubs,
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but
it is
absolutely
imperative that
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moving
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already
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established
concerns will not be feasible.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 1667 what you do in your spare time. do you have any hobbies or interests? well, i love to do lots of things in my spare time. like playing online games chatting with my friends watching movies playing cricket outside with my team sometimes i prefer outing v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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