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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.8

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation? v. 8
In recent times, brain drain has become a global issue, especially in many developing countries around the world. In this essay, I will shed some light on the factors contributing to this problem and will also suggest some solutions for the same. It is evident that professionals are migrating from their own developing country to reside or work in a developed one; thereby, leading to two obvious outcomes: a decrease in professionals in the developing countries and a negative impact on these countries’ economy. The migration of experts from the poor country results in a brain drain. For instance, recent immigration report has claimed that plethora of doctors from India are applying for citizenship in USA and Canada; thus, India is facing a huge deficiency of expert doctors. Moreover, migration slows the growth rate of the developing country also. For example, if teachers leave their own country; schools may not be able to produce sharp students, which will ultimately affect the future growth of a country’s economy. There are a plethora of solutions to overcome the migration problem. Firstly, in order to stop the brain drain, the government should make the salary of professionals equivalent to what is being paid in developed countries. In fact, a recent study has concluded that hiking salary has helped in stopping professionals from moving to other countries. Another possible solution is to provide better jobs and infrastructure to citizens. To exemplify, nowadays, schools in India are adopting latest technology similar to other developed countries; consequently, it has created more jobs and teachers find teaching more interesting and fun. In conclusion, even though migration is a growing problem which leads to a decrease in the number of professionals and affect the economy’s growth, various means and methods such as providing high salary and suitable infrastructure are available which can prevent this from worsening.
In recent times, brain drain has become a global issue,
especially
in
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many
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developing
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countries
around the world. In this essay, I will shed
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some
light on the factors contributing to this problem and will
also
suggest
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some
solutions for the same.

It is evident that
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professionals
are migrating from their
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own
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developing
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country
to reside or work in a developed one; thereby, leading to two obvious outcomes: a decrease in
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professionals
in the
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developing
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countries
and a
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negative
impact on these
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countries’
economy. The
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migration
of experts from the poor
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country
results in a brain drain.
For instance
, recent immigration report has claimed that plethora of doctors from India are applying for citizenship
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in USA
and Canada;
thus
, India is facing a huge deficiency of expert doctors.
Moreover
,
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migration
slows the growth rate of the
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developing
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country
also
.
For example
, if teachers
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leave
their
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own
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country
; schools may not be able to produce sharp students, which will
ultimately
affect the future growth of a
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country’s
economy.

There are a plethora of solutions to overcome the
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migration
problem.
Firstly
, in order to
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stop
the brain drain, the
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government
should
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make
the salary of
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professionals
equivalent to what is
being paid
in developed
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countries
. In fact, a recent study has concluded that hiking salary has
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helped
in stopping
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professionals
from moving to other
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countries
. Another possible solution is to provide better jobs and infrastructure to citizens. To exemplify, nowadays, schools in India are adopting
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latest
technology similar to other developed
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countries
;
consequently
, it has created more jobs and teachers find teaching more interesting and fun.

In conclusion
,
even though
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migration
is a growing problem which leads to a decrease in the number of
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professionals
and affect the economy’s growth, various means and methods such as providing high salary and suitable infrastructure are available which can
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prevent
this from worsening.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation? v. 8

Essay
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308 words
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