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Nowadays the way people relate with each other has changed due to technology Do you think technology has changed people’s relationship towards each other v.1

Nowadays the way people relate with each other has changed due to technology Do you think technology has changed people’s relationship towards each other v. 1
3rd essay: Ques: Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Is this a positive or negative development In recent times, means of communication by people has taken another Dimension drastically as a result of technology. This essay will shed more light on how technology has affected how people interact with each other. Leaving no stone on Turn, I will further explain how the changes could be positive or negative. Firstly, Computer and telecommunication are seen as a positive change in the economy has it helped to reduce cost of living in a way. For instance, in the early 60s, passing messages across to Friends and Families are not so easy such as time, transportation fee e. t. c. Unlike now, majorities of these Messages can be passed across via telephone with little amount compared to the no technology era. Secondly, healthy relationship is very key. However, the existence of automations has brought about distances between Friends and Families. In addition to this, people hardly share that Bond of doing physical things together and our older ones sometimes pick offences from that by seeing it as a sign of disrespect. For example, my mother in law recently Band me from calling her as she believes my frequent calls contributes to my Lack of visit. An impression like this is a negative one. In conclusion, machines had greatly affected the relationships people share in either a negative or positive way and manner. Automations had led to several marital break ups that recently people get engaged with their spouses through social Media, without getting to know them as a Person which has led to different marriages/relationships crashing down. No
3rd essay:

Ques: Nowadays the way
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many
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people
interact with each other has
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changed
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because
of technology.

In what ways
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has
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technology
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affected
the types of relationships
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people
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make
?

Is this a
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positive
or
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negative
development

In recent times, means of communication by
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people
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has
taken another Dimension
drastically
as a result
of
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technology
. This essay will shed more light on how
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technology
has
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affected
how
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people
interact with each other. Leaving no stone on Turn, I will
further
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explain
how the
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changes
could be
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positive
or
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negative
.

Firstly
, Computer and telecommunication are
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seen
as a
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positive
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change
in the economy has it
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helped
to
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reduce
cost of living in a way.
For instance
, in the early 60s, passing messages across to Friends and Families are not
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so
easy such as time, transportation fee e. t. c. Unlike
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now
, majorities of these Messages can
be passed
across via telephone with
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little
amount compared to the no
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technology
era.

Secondly
, healthy relationship is
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very
key.
However
, the existence of automations has brought about distances between Friends and Families.
In addition
to this,
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people
hardly share that Bond of doing physical things together and our older ones
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sometimes
pick
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offences
from that by seeing it as a
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sign
of disrespect.
For example
, my
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mother in law
recently Band me from calling her as she believes my frequent calls contributes to my Lack of visit. An impression like this is a
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negative
one.

In conclusion
, machines had
greatly
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affected
the relationships
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people
share in either a
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negative
or
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positive
way and manner. Automations had led to several marital
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break ups
that recently
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people
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get
engaged with their spouses through social Media, without getting to know them as a Person which has led to
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different
marriages/relationships crashing down. No
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays the way people relate with each other has changed due to technology Do you think technology has changed people’s relationship towards each other v. 1

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
294 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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