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Some people believe that the best way to run a business is within the family while others consider this a potential source of problems. Do the the advantages of a family business overweight disadvantages? v.1

Some people believe that the best way to run a business is within the family while others consider this a potential source of problems. Do the the advantages of a family business overweight disadvantages? v. 1
Managing one's own business is always a challenging task. Hence, some argue that in order to be successful, owners should get their families involved to run the companies. However, others believe that influence of the loved ones could lead to unnecessary complications. Personally, I think there are more drawback of this method than benefits. To begin with, sometimes it is quite difficult to maintain the discipline of a working environment if there are family members around. In a normal family situation everyone love and respect each other. As a result, they do not complain about small mistakes of others members. In other words they just forget about it. Imagine a business the allow silly mistakes to be happened by the management. Consequently, it could lead to lose valuable customers and profit for that company. Another negative outcome of this would be the bad influence of these actions on non-relative staff. Because, they might start using those bad examples as  excuses when they have done something wrong. On the other hand, this may encourage the conflicts within the family itself. If the business owner advises a relative regarding a business matter the person who receive, it might identify it as an insult to him or her, which eventually generate unwanted tension between them. For instance, in Sri Lanka there were a large sweets manufacture in the past, which owned by two brothers, because of a simple misunderstanding among them the company went down and they lost everything including their house. Therefore, asking family to join the operation of an organization could lead to unforeseen circumstances. In conclusion, it is always better to think twice before inviting relative to join one's business. Because it could encourage a sloppy work place and generate conflicts between the family members.
Managing one's
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own
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is always a challenging task.
Hence
,
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some
argue that in order to be successful, owners should
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get
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families
involved to run the
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companies
.
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, others believe that influence of the
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loved
ones could lead to unnecessary complications.
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there are more drawback of this method than benefits.

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with,
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sometimes
it is quite difficult to maintain the discipline of a working environment if there are
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members around. In a normal
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situation everyone
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love
and respect each
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.
As a result
, they do not complain about
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small
mistakes of others members. In
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words they
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forget about it. Imagine a
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the
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silly mistakes to
be happened
by the management.
Consequently
, it could lead to lose valuable customers and profit for that
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company
. Another
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outcome of this would be the
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influence of these actions on non-relative staff.
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using those
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excuses when they have done something
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.

On the
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hand, this may encourage the conflicts within the
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family
itself. If the
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business
owner advises a relative regarding a
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business
matter the person who receive, it might identify it as an insult to him or her, which
eventually
generate unwanted tension between them.
For instance
, in Sri Lanka there were a large sweets manufacture in the past, which
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owned
by two brothers,
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because
of a simple misunderstanding among them the
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company
went
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down and
they lost everything including their
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house
.
Therefore
, asking
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family
to
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join
the operation of an organization could lead to unforeseen circumstances.

In conclusion
, it is always better to
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think
twice
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before
inviting relative to
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one's
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business
.
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Because
it could encourage a sloppy work place and generate conflicts between the
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family
members.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the best way to run a business is within the family while others consider this a potential source of problems. Do the the advantages of a family business overweight disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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