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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. Discuss both systems and state which one do you think is better. Give reasons and relevant v.69

In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. Give reasons and relevant v. 69
In certain nations, parents choose lie partners for their children, whereas in other cases and nations, people have the right to choose the person with whom they want to marry. In my opinion, I do believe that since marriage is the most important decision in a person’s life, they should choose their groom or bride with whom they are comfortable and can live a happy life. In several countries parents take the marriage related decisions for their children as they have an opinion that they do not know about the world and people so they might take wrong decision in choosing their marriage partner. Moreover, parents love their children unconditionally and are over-protective, taking best decision which will make them to live a happy and successful life. Furthermore, parents will choose the partner who is financial and emotionally strong and of same religion and culture, so that it is much easier to raise children and to keep alive their ethical values and the divorce rate will be low. To elucidate, in India, parents choose life partners for their children However, people in other countries prefer to choose their partners themselves as they have an opinion that they have to live with them for entire life. People before taking the marriage decisions get familiar with the person, having knowledge about their likes, dislikes, habit, interest, temperament, and after analysing carefully decides to marry or not. Additionally, they believe that before, marrying one should know that their nature and interest matches with them, as this will reduce the chance of conflicts and divorce. To exemplify, in countries like Canada and America, people have the right and freedom to marry the person they want to. To conclude, I vehemently agree the privilege to choose lie partners not only reduce the rate of separation and fights but also increase love and understanding among couples.
In certain nations,
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parents
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choose
lie
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partners
for their
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children
, whereas in other cases and nations,
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people
have the right to
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choose
the
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person
with whom they want to marry. In my opinion, I do believe that since
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marriage
is the most
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important
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decision
in a
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person’s
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life
, they should
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choose
their groom or bride with whom they are comfortable and can
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live
a happy life.

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In
several countries
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parents
take the
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marriage
related
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decisions
for their
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children
as they have an opinion that they do not know about the world and
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people
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so
they might take
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wrong
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decision
in choosing their
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marriage
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partner
.
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,
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parents
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love
their
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children
unconditionally
and are over-protective, taking best
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decision
which will
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make
them to
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live
a happy and successful
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life
.
Furthermore
,
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parents
will
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choose
the
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partner
who is financial and
emotionally
strong and of same religion and culture,
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so
that it is much easier to raise
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children
and to
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keep
alive their ethical values and the divorce rate will be low. To elucidate, in India,
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parents
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choose
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life
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partners
for their
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children


However
,
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people
in other countries prefer to
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choose
their
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partners
themselves as they have an opinion that they
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have to
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live
with them for entire
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life
.
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People
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before
taking the
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marriage
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decisions
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get
familiar with the
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person
, having knowledge about their likes, dislikes, habit, interest, temperament, and after
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analysing
carefully
decides to marry or not.
Additionally
, they believe that
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, marrying one should know that their nature and interest matches with them, as this will
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reduce
the chance of conflicts and divorce. To exemplify, in countries like Canada and America,
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people
have the right and freedom to marry the
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person
they want to.

To conclude
, I
vehemently
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agree
the privilege to
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choose
lie
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partners
not
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only
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reduce
the rate of separation and fights
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but
also
increase
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love
and understanding among couples.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. Give reasons and relevant v. 69

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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