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Too much emphasis is being placed on going university for academic education. People should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a shortage of qualified tradespeople. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Too much emphasis is being placed on going university for academic education. People should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a shortage of qualified tradespeople. v. 2
By a great many people, professional preparing is viewed as a disgraceful break course for the individuals who are not shrewd enough to go to universities. Presently that the shortage of qualified experts, for example, development laborers, circuit testers, and smithies is getting progressively intense, some have recommended that more individuals ought to be urged to experience professional preparing. I provide a reason to feel ambiguous about no the veracity of this announcement. there are various advantages that can be derived from going to exchange schools, rather than colleges. In the first place, programs of professional schools are regularly shorter. All the more exceptionally, while students need to focus on in any event 3 years of full-time study, it takes just 1 or 2 years for students to get certain particular certifications. Furthermore, the principal focal point of professional projects is on giving hands-on experience to students and there is no requirement for them to ponder subjects. The prime model for this is Vietnamese students, paying little respect to what majors they pursue, are obliged to contemplate ideas of the socialist party while students of exchange schools don' t need to. For this reason, their employability is altogether upgraded. Regardless of such focal points, many are still skeptical about taking professional preparing as it doesn' t offer a lot of flexibility. I recognize that the profession decisions are significantly more restricted for professional students and that there is a minimal possibility for them to change their vocation in the event that they want to. In any case, if students get appropriate vocation direction program before leaving on their learning, scarcely any off-base choices will be made. Everything considered I can be slanted to repeat that professional preparing should never again be kept on the periphery of the instructive framework and that it ought to be energized among students of all degrees of education.
By a great
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many
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people
,
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professional
preparing
is viewed
as a disgraceful break course for the individuals who are not shrewd
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enough
to go to universities.
Presently
that the shortage of qualified experts,
for example
, development laborers, circuit testers, and smithies is getting
progressively
intense,
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some
have recommended that more individuals ought to
be urged
to experience
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professional
preparing. I provide a reason to feel ambiguous about
Did you mean "now" (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
no
the veracity of this announcement.

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there
are various advantages that can
be derived
from going to exchange schools,
rather
than colleges. In the
first
place, programs of
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professional
schools are
regularly
shorter. All the more
exceptionally
, while
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students
need to focus on in any
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event
3 years of full-time study, it takes
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just
1 or 2 years for
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students
to
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get
certain particular certifications.
Furthermore
, the principal focal point of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professional
projects is on giving hands-on experience to
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students
and there is no requirement for them to ponder subjects. The prime model for this is Vietnamese
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students
, paying
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little
respect to what majors they pursue,
are obliged
to contemplate
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ideas
of the socialist party while
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students
of exchange schools
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don&
#039; t need to.
For this reason
, their employability is altogether upgraded.

Regardless of such focal points,
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many
are
still
skeptical about taking
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professional
preparing as it
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doesn&
#039; t offer
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a lot of
flexibility. I recognize that the profession decisions are
significantly
more restricted for
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professional
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students
and that there is a minimal possibility for them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
their vocation in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
that they want to. In any case, if
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students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
appropriate vocation direction program
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before
leaving on their learning,
scarcely
any off-base choices will
be made
.

Everything considered I can
be slanted
to repeat that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professional
preparing should never again be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
on the periphery of the instructive framework and that it ought to
be energized
among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
of all degrees of education.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Too much emphasis is being placed on going university for academic education. People should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a shortage of qualified tradespeople. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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