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Some people believe that studying online is more effective than studying on campus while others disagree Discuss both the views and provide your opinion v.2

Some people believe that studying online is more effective than studying on campus while others disagree 2
In this tech-savvy world, with the introduction of online learning, study is not just limited to classroom sessions. The effectiveness of e-learning over physical classes is a topic of contention; while some believe online classes are successful because of it’s reach, others argue that in-class study provides opportunities to develop skills required for professional world, to which I strongly advocate. This essay will explore both the school of thoughts. The fundamental reason for people contending e-learning to be highly effective is because of it’s easy accessibility and comfort. Number of courses and certifications are just a click away from students’ reach, thereby helping them study at their own place and comfortable pace. This boost up the confidence in student because he/she is not being compared with anyone which is a case in physical classes. For example, websites like Simply Learn, Khan Academy have made learning enjoyable with gamification, helping students comprehend their learning and finally awarding them with a certification. Therefore, people hold a belief that this advancement in learning is certainly helpful for students. On the contrary, some believe that in-class study is beneficial because it instills discipline and interpersonal skills in the lives of students -- which is very important. Physical institutes have a set time table for classes, exams, functions, etcetera, which creates a fixed routine making pupils understand the value of time. Also, classroom based learning provides an opportunity to students to interact with people from different backgrounds, thus improving their communication skills; which is an advantage over e-learning. For an instance, students can learn about the cultures of people from different countries, making them grow personally. Hence, universities help students in their softs skills development, owing to good careers for their future. Though, I am a strong supporter of physical classes because of the atmosphere it provides, that help students understand human values, but there no denial on the ease that e-learning has bought in for people, especially for those who cannot go to universities because of certain reasons.
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is not
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limited to classroom sessions. The effectiveness of e-learning over
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is a topic of contention; while
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some
believe online
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are successful
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of it’s reach
, others argue that in-
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class
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study
provides opportunities to develop
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skills
required for professional world, to which I
strongly
advocate. This essay will explore both the school of thoughts.

The fundamental reason for
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people
contending e-learning to be
highly
effective is
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because
of
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it’s easy accessibility
and comfort. Number of courses and certifications are
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just
a click away from
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students’
reach, thereby helping them
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study
at their
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own
place and comfortable pace. This boost up the confidence in
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student
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because
he/she is not
being compared
with anyone which is a case in
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physical
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classes
.
For example
, websites like
Simply
Learn, Khan Academy have made
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learning
enjoyable with gamification, helping
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students
comprehend their
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learning
and
finally
awarding them with a certification.
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,
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people
hold a belief that this advancement in
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learning
is
certainly
helpful for students.

On the contrary
,
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some
believe that in-
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class
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study
is beneficial
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because
it instills discipline and interpersonal
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skills
in the
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lives
of
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students
-- which is
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very
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important
.
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Physical
institutes have a set time table for
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classes
, exams, functions, etcetera, which creates a
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fixed
routine making pupils understand the value of time.
Also
, classroom based
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learning
provides an opportunity to
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students
to interact with
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people
from
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different
backgrounds,
thus
improving their communication
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skills
; which is an advantage over e-learning. For an instance,
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students
can learn about the cultures of
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people
from
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different
countries, making them grow
personally
.
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, universities
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help
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students
in their
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softs
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skills
development, owing to
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good
careers for their future.

Though, I am a strong supporter of
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physical
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classes
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because
of the atmosphere it provides, that
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help
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students
understand human values,
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but
there no denial on the
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ease
that e-learning has
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bought
in for
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people
,
especially
for those who cannot go to universities
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because
of certain reasons.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that studying online is more effective than studying on campus while others disagree 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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