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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. Discuss both systems and state which one do you think is better. Give reasons and relevant v.35

In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. Give reasons and relevant v. 35
Each species, no matter how small, have a role to play in the ecosystem. Loss of animals has detrimental effects on medical research and the development of treatment. Moreover, we should preserve animals for future generation to enjoy. In addition, Funding to save wildlife represents a small fraction of the amount of money spent by governments and does not significantly impact the amount of taxes that need to be collected. In this essay, the value of funding the wildlife will be discussed. Focusing on different problems is comparable in some respects. Like focus on wildlife, Health problems aim to develop the medical systems, in order to prepare them for their future lives. Both types of problems are also very similar in the way they will save future generations. So, If government solves one problem, it will consequently solve multiple problems at a time. As wildlife will be saved, Scientists can research about various diseases and find remedies for them. As a result, human lives can be saved by taking help of animal testing. Thus, saving animals will also help to save mankind. Despite these similarities, there are a number of marked differences in different problems such as funding of arts and wildlife protection is a totally different issue. While I still in the favour of protecting animals. More and More animals are becoming extinct, which lead to the possibility that our upcoming generations will be deprived of seeing animals that we grow seeing. As a result, it leads to the lack of imagination and diversity. Moreover, they deserve the equal rights to see them as they did not commit any crime. Sparrows, for instance, do no longer exist due to man's hunting activities. A key consideration for any government is the extent to which it should fund the wildlife. Almost, always, the wildlife represents a very small proportion of the government funding, which is primarily focused on other areas. Therefore, modest funding for the wildlife has little impact on taxpayers.
Each species, no matter how
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small
, have a role to play in the ecosystem. Loss of
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animals
has detrimental effects on medical research and the development of treatment.
Moreover
, we should preserve
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animals
for future generation to enjoy.
In addition
,
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Funding
to save
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wildlife
represents a
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small
fraction of the amount of money spent by
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governments
and does not
significantly
impact the amount of taxes that need to
be collected
. In this essay, the value of
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funding
the
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wildlife
will
be discussed
.

Focusing on
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different
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problems
is comparable in
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some
respects. Like focus on
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wildlife
, Health
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problems
aim to develop the medical systems, in order to prepare them for their future
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lives
. Both types of
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problems
are
also
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very
similar in the way they will save future generations.
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So
, If
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government
solves one
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problem
, it will
consequently
solve multiple
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problems
at a time. As
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wildlife
will
be saved
, Scientists can research about various diseases and find remedies for them.
As a result
, human
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lives
can
be saved
by taking
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help
of
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animal
testing.
Thus
, saving
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animals
will
also
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help
to save mankind.

Despite these similarities, there are a number of marked differences in
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different
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problems
such as
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funding
of arts and
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wildlife
protection is a
totally
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different
issue.
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While
I
still
in the
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favour
of protecting
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animals
. More and More
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animals
are becoming extinct, which lead to the possibility that our upcoming generations will
be deprived
of seeing
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animals
that we grow seeing.
As a result
, it leads to the lack of imagination and diversity.
Moreover
, they deserve the equal rights to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
them as they did not commit any crime. Sparrows,
for instance
, do no longer exist due to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
's hunting activities.

A key consideration for any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
is the extent to which it should fund the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wildlife
. Almost, always, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wildlife
represents a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
proportion of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
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funding
, which is
primarily
focused on other areas.
Therefore
, modest
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funding
for the
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wildlife
has
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little
impact on taxpayers.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
I am always sorry when any language is lost, because languages are the pedigrees of nations.
Samuel Johnson

IELTS essay In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. Give reasons and relevant v. 35

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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