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76. When you have a lot of homework, do you prefer to complete the assignments in the library or at your apartment, dorm, or house? Why? v.1

76. When you have a lot of homework, do you prefer to complete the assignments in the library or at your apartment, dorm, or house? Why? v. 1
It is often thought that in a lot of country's chemicals are being used to make the end product of consumptions extended and also to conserve it finally. Furthermore, in my opinion, I strongly believe that the advantages overweigh the disadvantages. In the next paragraphs I will discuss the positive and negative sides of this issue. First of all, the expiry date of most products will increase due to the synthetic component. The reason for this is that those ingredients contain elements that protect the food for any increase in fungal or bacterial. For example, these days a huge number of nutriments in the supermarket or other grocery shops is packed in a way that the food can be preserved for a longer time of period. Whereas, customers are able to invest in a huge amount of the meal, without any concern. All in all, it is more significant to have that in our life. On the other hand, a huge amount of chemicals can damage our body. This can make an upward trend in diseases such as cancer. The reason for this is that it is not a natural component, although it is a product that is made by the humans. For example, a group of businesses is making use of these preservatives to make the nourishment look much more fascinating. So, that's why it is a lot better to avoid it to be sure that your health is safe. To conclude, chemicals are being used in a lot of country's to make the meal and to preserve it. However, some of them believe that it can have a negative impact. In my opinion, I strongly believe that the advantages outweigh the negative problems, because as a customer you are able to keep the end product longer and it is a lot easier to purchase a huge amount without worrying about being invalid.
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thought
that in a
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lot
of country's chemicals are being
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make
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end
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product
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consumptions
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.
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overweigh
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next
paragraphs I will discuss the
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positive
and
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negative
sides of this issue.

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First of all
, the expiry date of most
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products
will increase due to the synthetic component.
The reason for this is
that those ingredients contain elements that protect the food for any increase in fungal or bacterial.
For example
, these days a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
huge
number of nutriments in the supermarket or other grocery shops
is packed
in a way that the food can
be preserved
for a longer time of period. Whereas, customers are able to invest in a
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huge
amount of the meal, without any concern. All in all, it is more significant to have that in our life.

On the other hand
, a
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huge
amount of chemicals can damage our body. This can
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make
an upward trend in diseases such as cancer.
The reason for this is
that it is not a natural component, although it is a
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product
that
is made
by the humans.
For example
, a group of businesses is making
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use
of these preservatives to
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make
the nourishment look much more fascinating.
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So
, that's why it is a
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lot
better to avoid it to be sure that your health is safe.

To conclude
, chemicals are being
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used
in a
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lot
of country's to
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make
the meal and to preserve it.
However
,
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some
of them believe that it can have a
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negative
impact. In my opinion, I
strongly
believe that the advantages outweigh the
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negative
problems,
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because
as a customer you are able to
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keep
the
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end
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product
longer and it is a
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lot
easier to
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purchase
a
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huge
amount without worrying about being invalid.
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IELTS essay 76. When you have a lot of homework, do you prefer to complete the assignments in the library or at your apartment, dorm, or house? Why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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