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The pie chart shows the main reasons what agriculture land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three region of the world during the 1990s. v.1

The pie chart shows the main reasons what agriculture land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three region of the world during the 1990s. v. 1
Electronic devices have taken the place of papers; reading from them is quite an easy task. The benefits of reading on the screen, depending upon the person’s personal choice. Reading from a soft file helps to get the faster context of the writing, while papers have limited access. Gadgets such as laptops, tablets, and iPads are the in thing, and no one could escape from the advantages they provide. Screen reading, for instance, could give multiple options such as on the go meaning of a word, references of the source, and easy to carry multiple books in one device. The new generation can not go with the old bulky books when whole things could be in just a single handy device, which makes life easy. In the market, various cheap to high priced gadgets are available with the preloaded option for reading from kindle (e-book reading source), affordable for everyone. Thus, this trend reveals a positive change in people’s lives and getting more out of one single thing is better than carrying multiple books. In addition, the significance of e-books to every single individual who reads is quite high. The good thing is reading them has become an easy thing because of user-friendly operating systems of the devices. Getting e-book is faster and cheaper than to afford a hard book. Moreover, no maintenance cost and the book are forever with you, and can be shared with anyone. Still, a few things cannot go in favour of reading stuff from devices. There are consequences, and more a user stares to a blue screen the more will be the strain on the eyes. Myopia has become a very common eye problem; this is the effect of watching everything on the screen. A book hooks a person gives a more lively experience and can act as a companion. Sometimes people take the printout of e-books for convenient reading, which is a waste of money. Having advantages and some problems still proves that e-books are the future, and without which reading would become impossible. Access is easy, and cheaper options are available to get most of the e-books; however, effects on eyes can not be neglected.
Electronic
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devices
have taken the place of papers;
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reading
from them is quite an
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easy
task. The benefits of
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reading
on the
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screen
, depending upon the person’s personal choice.
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Reading
from a soft file
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helps
to
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get
the faster context of the writing, while papers have limited access.

Gadgets such as laptops, tablets, and iPads are the in thing, and no one could escape from the advantages they provide.
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Screen
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reading
,
for instance
, could give multiple options such as on the go meaning of a word, references of the source, and
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easy
to carry multiple
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books
in one
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device
. The new generation can not
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go with
the
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old
bulky
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books
when whole things could be in
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just
a single handy
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device
, which
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makes
life
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easy
. In the market, various
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cheap
to high priced gadgets are available with the preloaded option for
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reading
from kindle (e-book
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reading
source), affordable for everyone.
Thus
, this trend reveals a
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positive
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change
in
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people
’s
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lives
and getting more out of one single thing is better than carrying multiple books.

In addition
, the significance of e-books to every single individual who reads is quite high. The
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good
thing is
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reading
them has become an
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easy
thing
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because
of user-friendly operating systems of the
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devices
. Getting e-book is faster and cheaper than to afford a
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hard
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book
.
Moreover
, no maintenance cost and the
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book
are forever with you, and can
be shared
with anyone.

Still
, a few things cannot go in
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favour
of
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reading
stuff from
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devices
. There are consequences, and more a user stares to a blue
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
screen
the more will be the strain on the eyes. Myopia has become a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
common eye problem; this is the effect of watching everything on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
screen
. A
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book
hooks a person gives a more lively experience and can act as a companion.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Sometimes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
take the printout of e-books for convenient
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reading
, which is a waste of money.

Having advantages and
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some
problems
still
proves that e-books are the future, and without which
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reading
would become impossible. Access is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
easy
, and cheaper options are available to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
most of the e-books;
however
, effects on eyes can not
be neglected
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The pie chart shows the main reasons what agriculture land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three region of the world during the 1990s. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
362 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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