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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.28

: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 28
Nowadays, a plethora of people suffering from different energy ailments due to the unhealthy lifestyle. In the modern era, Only the person who has good wealth can afford the medicine because of its high cost. To, cope up with this problem every nation should have free health centres and expensive medical treatment also available there. In this essay, I agree with the statement and discussed my opinion. In the global era, where the majority of folks suffering from numerous energy problems, need proper strength service so that they can treat themselves. So, for this authority should provide free health services to their citizens to lead a better life. I want to share an experience of my neighbour who is suffering from cancer and don't have enough budget for the treatment, but a free cancer hospital, which was run by the government of the Delhi admitted him and treat him with all the latest medical remedy in a very less budget. It is a good concept if all the nations provide free well-being care services to their people so that they can lead a happy and healthy life because In today's world doctors charged high fees and is not possible for everybody to pay. These services really helpful to them. To conclude, a plethora of people suffering from energy issues due to unhealthy lifestyle and environmental factors and it's very difficult for a man who don't even get a two time meal to eat, go for a treatment so, free health centres are the best options for every slot of folks in the society.
Nowadays, a plethora of
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people
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suffering
from
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different
energy ailments due to the unhealthy lifestyle.

In the modern era,
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Only
the person who has
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good
wealth can afford the medicine
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because
of its high cost. To, cope up with this problem every nation should have
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free
health
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centres
and expensive medical treatment
also
available there. In this essay, I
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agree
with the statement and discussed my opinion.

In the global era, where the majority of folks
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suffering
from numerous energy problems, need proper strength
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service
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so
that they can treat themselves.
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So
, for this authority should provide
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free
health
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services
to their citizens to lead a better life. I want to share an experience of my
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neighbour
who is
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suffering
from cancer and don't have
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enough
budget for the treatment,
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but
a
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free
cancer hospital, which
was run
by the
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government
of the Delhi admitted him and treat him with all the latest medical remedy in a
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very
less budget.

It is a
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good
concept if all the nations provide
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free
well-being care
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services
to their
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people
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so
that they can lead a happy and healthy life
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because
In
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today
's world doctors charged high fees and is not possible for everybody to pay. These
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services
really
helpful to them.

To conclude
, a plethora of
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people
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suffering
from energy issues due to unhealthy lifestyle and environmental factors and it's
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very
difficult for a
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man
who don't even
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get
a two time meal to eat, go for a treatment
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so
,
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free
health
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centres
are the best options for every slot of folks in the society.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay : Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 28

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
263 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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