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Write about the following topic: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.1

: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 1
Providing a basic health care without charge is a responsibility of individual countriescountry. As the population has grown by a leap, it is highly impossible to serve expensive treatments to their citizen's with free of cost. I agree with the option of basic health care support by the government is essential. However, Individual ought to own the costly expenses, medical care of themselves. Firstly, it is inevitable that every country has to arrange basic health care for free of cost to their country citizen's because they are paying taxes which has to utilise for their own health. For instance, paying money for small illness would charge more money from the pocket. If the government provides basic health care for free, public can lead a better life and also it encourages many refugees to migrate to the country as health is the primary concern, which everyone look while planning to a new country. As a result, country economy boost dramatically. On the other hand, Although government can assist basic health care with no charge, it is impossible borne costly surgeries. For example, a surgery for a brain, which costs 5000 dollars would be a huge burden for the authorities to manage from taxes and other revenue. However, if a person is in critical situation and do not have sufficient money for his health then government should support to mitigate the problem. Its a boon for people who are below poverty level. In conclusion, I pen down, saying that, it is not country who has to take care of all the health care health care and individuals have to take care of their health and severe health issues in emergency situations. Based on the individual income, country should support partially when it's really needed.
Providing a
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basic
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health
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care
without charge is a responsibility of
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individual
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countriescountry
. As the population has grown by a leap, it is
highly
impossible to serve expensive treatments to their citizen's with free of cost. I
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agree
with the option of
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basic
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health
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care
support by the
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government
is essential.
However
,
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Individual
ought to
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own
the costly expenses, medical
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care
of themselves.

Firstly
, it is inevitable that every
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country
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has to
arrange
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basic
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health
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care
for free of cost to their
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country
citizen's
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because
they are paying taxes which
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has to
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utilise
for their
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own
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health
.
For instance
, paying money for
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small
illness would charge more money from the pocket. If the
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government
provides
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basic
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health
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care
for free, public can lead a better life and
also
it encourages
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many
refugees to migrate to the
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country
as
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health
is the primary concern, which everyone
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look
while planning to a new
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country
.
As a result
,
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country
economy boost
dramatically
.

On the other hand
, Although
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government
can assist
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basic
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health
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care
with no charge, it is impossible borne costly surgeries.
For example
, a surgery for a brain, which costs 5000 dollars would be a huge burden for the authorities to manage from taxes and other revenue.
However
, if a person is in critical situation and do not have sufficient money for his
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health
then
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government
should support to mitigate the problem.
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Its
a boon for
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people
who are below poverty level.

In conclusion
, I pen down, saying that, it is not
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country
who
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has to
take
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care
of all the
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health
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care
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health
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care
and
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individuals
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have to
take
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care
of their
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health
and severe
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health
issues in emergency situations. Based on the
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individual
income,
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country
should support
partially
when it's
really
needed.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay : Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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