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Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. with this view? v. 9
In recent years, extreme sports have become increasingly popular, and a number of people argue that governments should prohibit them. I completely disagree with the idea that these sports are too risky, and I therefore believe that they should not be banned. In my opinion, consequently-called extreme sports are not as hazardous as a plethora of people think. All sports involve a number of element of risk, and there shall always be clear regulations and safety procedures to reduce the possibility of accidents. People who take part in extreme sports are usually required to undergo appropriate training so that the dangers are minimized. For example, anyone who wants to try skydiving will need to sign up for lessons with a registered club, and beginners are not admissible to dive solo; they must be accompanied by an experienced professional. Finally, the protective equipment and technology used in sports from motor racing to mountain climbing is constantly improving safety. While I support regulations and safety measures, I believe that it would be incorrect, and almost impossible, to ban extreme sports. In the first place, we should all be free to decide how we spend our leisure time; as long as we understand the risks, I do not believe that politicians should stop us from enjoying ourselves. However, an even stronger argument against such a ban would be the difficulty of enforcing it. a number of of the most risky sports, like base jumping or enormous wave surfing, are practiced far away from the reach of any authorities. I cannot imagine the police being called to stop people from parachuting off a mountain face or surfing on an isolated beach. In conclusion, I would argue that people should be free to enjoy extreme sports as long as they understand the risks and take the appropriate precautions.
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sports
have become
increasingly
popular, and a number of
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people
argue

that
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governments
should prohibit them. I completely disagree with the
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idea
that these

sports are too risky, and I
therefore
believe that they should not
be banned
.

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extreme
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sports
are not as hazardous as a plethora of
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people
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think
. All

sports involve a number of element of
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risk
, and there shall always be
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clear
regulations and

safety procedures to
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reduce
the possibility of accidents.
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People
who
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take part
in extreme

sports are
usually
required to undergo appropriate training
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so
that the
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dangers
are minimized
.
For example
, anyone who wants to try skydiving will need to
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sign
up for lessons

with a registered club, and beginners are not admissible to dive solo; they
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must
be accompanied
by an experienced professional.
Finally
, the protective equipment and

technology
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used
in
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sports
from motor racing to mountain climbing is
constantly
improving

safety.

While I support regulations and safety measures, I believe that it would be incorrect, and almost impossible, to ban
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extreme
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sports
. In the
first
place, we should all be free to decide how we spend our leisure time; as long as we understand the
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risks
, I do not believe that politicians should
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stop
us from enjoying ourselves.
However
, an even stronger argument against such a ban would be the difficulty of enforcing it. a number
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of of
the most risky
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sports
, like base jumping or enormous wave surfing,
are practiced
far away from the reach of any authorities.

I cannot imagine the police
being called
to
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stop
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people
from parachuting off a mountain face or surfing on an isolated beach.

In conclusion
, I would argue that
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people
should be free to enjoy
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extreme
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sports
as long as they understand the
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risks
and take the appropriate precautions.
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IELTS essay Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. with this view?

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  American English
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303 words
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