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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Visa regulation should be relaxed for overseas students. Do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words. v.16

: Visa regulation should be relaxed for overseas students. v. 16
Due to growth in the migration process, several students move to another nation for further studies. However, they face many problems in obtaining a visa. Therefore, some people think that visa regulations must be smoothened for international students. In my opinion, if the visa process will be lenient then the system can be abused while a few strict norms should be relaxed. The main reasons why visa norms should be relaxed for international student. Firstly, students will move to another country for a long time by paying a huge amount of money, which will ultimately benefit a foreign country by paying taxes and fees. For instance, before applying for visa most of the universities attain fees of the college in advance whether it will be rejected or selected. Hence, international students are increasing overseas nations economy. Furthermore, many pupils often find it difficult to obtain a visa through immigrant agents as there are several cases of providing fake visa to the people. To elaborate, many of the immigrant agents give false details or betray people to earn money from them. Thus, by relaxing visa process students can attain a visa by themselves. Conversely, there are a few reasons that visa application process should remain similar. As it is evident that the number of cases of abusing the system is soaring in some countries since they are those students who went abroad on loosen visa processing. Consequently, it is better for stringent the visa application. To conclude, although there are few cases of disturbing the society in the foreign countries by international students, I believe that the visa process for overseas students could be relaxed those who obey norms and conditions of the host nation properly.
Due to growth in the migration
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process
, several
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students
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move
to another nation for
further
studies.
However
, they face
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many
problems in obtaining a visa.
Therefore
,
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some
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people
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think
that visa regulations
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must
be smoothened
for
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international
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students
. In my opinion, if the visa
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process
will be lenient then the system can
be abused
while a few strict norms should
be relaxed
.

The main reasons why visa norms should
be relaxed
for
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international
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student
.
Firstly
,
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students
will
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move
to another
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country
for a long time by paying a huge amount of money, which will
ultimately
benefit a foreign
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country
by paying taxes and fees.
For instance
,
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before
applying for visa most of the universities attain fees of the college in advance whether it will
be rejected
or selected.
Hence
,
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international
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students
are increasing overseas
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nations
economy.
Furthermore
,
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many
pupils
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often
find it difficult to obtain a visa through immigrant agents as there are several cases of providing fake visa to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. To elaborate,
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many
of the immigrant agents give false
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details
or betray
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to earn money from them.
Thus
, by relaxing visa
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process
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students
can attain a visa by themselves.

Conversely
, there are a few reasons that visa application
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process
should remain similar. As it is evident that the number of cases of abusing the system is soaring in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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countries
since they are those
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students
who went abroad on loosen visa processing.
Consequently
, it is better for stringent the visa application.

To conclude
, although there are few cases of disturbing the society in the foreign
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countries
by
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international
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students
, I believe that the visa
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process
for overseas
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students
could
be relaxed
those who obey norms and conditions of the host nation
properly
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay : Visa regulation should be relaxed for overseas students. v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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