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The internet is a great source of information and has opened up opportunity for people to learn over the world. Is all information reliable on the internet? What could be done to control information online? v.1

The internet is a great source of information and has opened up opportunity for people to learn over the world. Is all information reliable on the internet? What could be done to control information online? v. 1
There is no doubt that the usage of the internet is accelerating on the fast pace to acquire knowledge on any topic. However, in my perception, all the information available on the internet is not trustworthy and to control such irrelevant content on the internet government should take strict steps. The reason why I believe that information on the internet contains fake ideas is that any person can post anything without having in-depth knowledge by making their websites, whereas, there are some professionals who create informative blogs and share knowledge with thorough studies in order to help university students as well as internet users. As a result, the majority of internet users get confused to choose the correct solution or option to their problem from so many websites available on the internet. For example, a recent poll by the UK government in January 2020 reported that out of 70 students, 35% were failed in the exam owing to following wrong websites dramatically. The imperative steps to curb such unethical contents is for the government to impose stringent rules on the IT department. The IT department should be under compulsion to create a page with security questions and trustworthy certificate for reliable bloggers, so that end-user tends to get an informative solution to their difficulties. Moreover, if publishers’ fulfil the condition of the page and continue to upload fake or irrelevant information, they should be charged a heavy penalty or completely ban so that they will think twice before uploading wrong contents. In conclusion, I completely disagree that all information available on the internet is reliable because people are at liberty to post anything without having in-depth knowledge. To restrict such unethical information the government must take severe steps with the help of the IT department so that end-users access to informative information only.
There is no doubt that the usage of the internet is accelerating on the
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fast
pace to acquire
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knowledge
on any topic.
However
, in my perception, all the
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information
available on the internet is not trustworthy and to control such irrelevant content on the internet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should take strict steps.

The reason why I believe that
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information
on the internet contains fake
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ideas
is that any person can post anything without having in-depth
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knowledge
by making their websites, whereas, there are
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some
professionals who create informative blogs and share
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
with thorough studies in order to
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help
university students
as well
as internet users.
As a result
, the majority of internet users
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get
confused to choose the correct solution or option to their problem from
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so
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many
websites available on the internet.
For example
, a recent poll by the UK
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government
in January 2020 reported that out of 70 students, 35%
were failed
in the exam owing to following
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wrong
websites
dramatically
.

The imperative steps to curb such unethical contents is for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
to impose stringent
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
on the IT department. The IT department should be under compulsion to create a page with security questions and trustworthy certificate for reliable bloggers,
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so
that
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end
-user tends to
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get
an informative solution to their difficulties.
Moreover
, if publishers’ fulfil the condition of the page and continue to upload fake or irrelevant
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information
, they should
be charged
a heavy penalty or completely ban
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so
that they will
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think
twice
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before
uploading
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wrong
contents.

In conclusion
, I completely disagree that all
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information
available on the internet is reliable
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because
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people
are at liberty to post anything without having in-depth
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
. To restrict such unethical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
take severe steps with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of the IT department
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so
that
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end
-users access to informative
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information
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only
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay The internet is a great source of information and has opened up opportunity for people to learn over the world. Is all information reliable on the internet? What could be done to control information online? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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