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Task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is a concern about its impact over local inhabitants and the environment. Do disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the adavantages? Write at least 250 words. v.1

Task 2 : International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is a concern about its impact over local inhabitants and the environment. Do disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the adavantages? v. 1
Tourism is a very big industry in the modern time and is growing quite rapidly. Thousands of people travel everywhere to various destinations every year. Arguments have come up regarding the benefits and negative impacts of tourism in places and on its local inhabitants and environment, however, I believe that there are more advantages than disadvantages of international tourism. People travel for various reasons; we travel for business purposes, holidays, visits friends and relatives etc. Travelling is mostly seen as a recreational activity. Tourism has many advantages. Tourism can play a tremendous role in a country's economy, the more the tourists visit a country and spend money there the better it is for the country; that way more money is circulated within the country and even the stability of their currency rate of exchange persists if not improve. Vendors and shops get to sell more goods and make an income. Tourism also has non-monetary advantages; it brings cultures and people closer. People from all around the world get to share their culture with each other and even learn more. This is a good opportunity in education. Tourism seems to have some disadvantages too; However, I believe the problems caused by tourism are not something that cannot be solved or prevented. A lot of people believe that tourism can destroy or deviate culture and causes quite an impact on visited locations such as pollution and littering. People can adhere to their beliefs and way of life if they want to; no one can really forcefully influence someone to change from their morals and ethics. Pollution can be avoided by increasing use of environmentally friendly vehicles used for tours and rentals, warnings and visual education on littering and smoking, specific times can be allocated for tours to certain areas, such as peak times where local feel uncomfortable due to many foreigners. Where there are problems there can always be solutions. Tourism can bring great advantages for any place in many ways and is a 'win-win' exchange process. The very few problems caused can be always avoided or taken care of. I believe tourism should be highly promoted, specially in traditional and poor countries with natural beauty such as Bangladesh.
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Tourism
is a
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very
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big
industry in the modern time and is growing quite
rapidly
. Thousands of
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people
travel everywhere to various destinations every year. Arguments have
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come
up regarding the benefits and
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negative
impacts of
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tourism
in places and on its local inhabitants and environment,
however
, I
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believe
that there are more
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advantages
than disadvantages of international tourism.

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People
travel for various reasons; we travel for business purposes, holidays, visits friends and relatives etc. Travelling is
mostly
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seen
as a recreational activity.
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Tourism
has
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many
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advantages
.
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Tourism
can play a tremendous role in a country's economy, the more the tourists visit a
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country
and spend money there the better it is for the
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country
; that way more money
is circulated
within the
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country
and even the stability of their currency rate of exchange persists if not
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improve
. Vendors and shops
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get
to sell more
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goods
and
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make
an income.
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Tourism
also
has non-monetary
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advantages
; it brings cultures and
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people
closer.
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People
from all around the world
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get
to share their culture with each other and even learn more. This is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
opportunity in education.

Tourism seems to have
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some
disadvantages too;
However
, I
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believe
the problems caused by
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tourism
are not something that cannot
be solved
or
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prevented
.
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A lot of
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people
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believe
that
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tourism
can
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destroy
or deviate culture and causes quite an impact on visited locations such as pollution and littering.
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People
can adhere to their beliefs and way of life if they want to; no one can
really
forcefully
influence someone to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
from their morals and ethics. Pollution can
be avoided
by increasing
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use
of
environmentally
friendly vehicles
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used
for tours and rentals, warnings and visual education on littering and smoking, specific times can
be allocated
for tours to certain areas, such as peak
It is better to use 'times' with the time-relative pronoun 'when': "times when". (Alternatively, use 'in/on which')
times where
local feel uncomfortable due to
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many
foreigners.

“Where” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Where
there are problems there can always be solutions.
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Tourism
can bring great
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advantages
for any place in
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many
ways and is a 'win-win' exchange process. The
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very
few problems caused can be always avoided or taken care of. I
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believe
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tourism
should be
highly
promoted,
specially
in traditional and poor
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countries
with natural beauty such as Bangladesh.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Task 2 : International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is a concern about its impact over local inhabitants and the environment. Do disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the adavantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
367 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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