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WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.2

WRITING TASK 2 : Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? v. 2
It is often viewed that all nations have disadvantaged people and every nation to implement various methods to tackle this problem. The primary reason for the widespread poverty is that lack of employment opportunities in many nations, and the most viable solution is to generate more job positions by developing the nation more economically. The main reason for poverty in the world is that people do not have sufficient jobs that meet their basic requirements. That is to say that some nations are poor or are developing, and compared with their economic background, generating new positions are unimaginable. Additionally, they have many other priorities to focus primarily, such as health and education of their citizens, and it is difficult for a nation to fulfil all these needs from their meagre economic background. For example, a recent report in the BBC revealed that the unemployment rate in many developing and underdeveloped nations are almost 12%, and they require more financial support to solve this rising problem along with others. To tackle this predicament the government should create more jobs for their citizen by upgrading their economy. In other words, these nations should focus on the intense economic progress that would attract the other developed nations to start their factories there, and also try to utilize their resources. If a nation succeeds to attract other nation's attention, and start their business there, it would create more job opportunities for the local people through this it will alleviate poverty. For example, when India succeeded to convince the Apple manufacturers to open their factory branch in Bangalore, it offered almost 30000 new job positions for the local people. In conclusion, it is true that poor people are disseminated in every country, and they have separate methods to handle this problem. I believe that the main reason for this widespread poverty is that lack of job opportunities in these places, and this predicament could be addressed through generating more job vacancies in that nation.
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viewed that all
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nations
have disadvantaged
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people
and every
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nation
to implement various methods to tackle this problem. The primary reason for the widespread
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poverty
is that lack of employment opportunities in
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many
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nations
, and the most viable solution is to generate more
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job
positions by developing the
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nation
more
economically
.

The main reason for
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poverty
in the world is that
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people
do not have sufficient
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jobs
that
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meet
their basic requirements.
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to say that
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some
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nations
are poor or are developing, and compared with their economic background, generating new positions are unimaginable.
Additionally
, they have
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many
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other
priorities to focus
primarily
, such as health and education of their citizens, and it is difficult for a
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nation
to fulfil all these needs from their
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meagre
economic background.
For example
, a recent report in the BBC revealed that the unemployment rate in
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many
developing and underdeveloped
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nations
are almost 12%, and they require more financial support to solve this rising problem along with others.

To tackle this predicament the
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government
should create more
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jobs
for their citizen by upgrading their economy. In
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other
words, these
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nations
should focus on the intense economic progress that would attract the
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other
developed
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nations
to
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start
their factories there, and
also
try to utilize their resources. If a
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nation
succeeds to attract
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other
nation's attention, and
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start
their business there, it would create more
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job
opportunities for the local
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people
through this it will alleviate
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poverty
.
For example
, when India succeeded to convince the Apple manufacturers to open their factory branch in Bangalore, it offered almost 30000 new
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job
positions for the local
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people
.

In conclusion
, it is true that poor
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people
are disseminated
in every country, and they have separate methods to handle this problem. I believe that the main reason for this widespread
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poverty
is that lack of
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job
opportunities in these places, and this predicament could
be addressed
through generating more
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job
vacancies in that
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nation
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay WRITING TASK 2 : Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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