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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, an v.19

The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
I completely disagree with the opinion that international sporting events are essential in easing international tensions and shall outline my reasons in this essay. International tensions are caused by many things, including political differences, religious issues and inequalities in levels of economic development. Sporting events are temporary and clearly have little or no advantageous effect on international relations. The Beijing Olympics, which were hailed as a wonderful opportunity to improve China’s relations with other countries, have apparently done nothing to further its relations with Japan. North Korea’s participation in the 2010 World Cup has not led to any decrease in the dangerous level of tension between that country and South Korea and the United States. Indeed, each side will no doubt say that this is the fault of the other, thereby possibly increasing tensions! Sporting events have been used as opportunities for certain groups of people to increase international tensions. In 1972, the Munich Olympics were hijacked by Palestinian terrorists and the extremely high levels of security at the Beijing Games are bound to be repeated – or even raised – for the London Olympics. To then suggest that such sporting events are essential to decrease international tensions seems to me to completely ignore history. Having said this, I do think that international sporting events could ease tensions, but the link doesn’t seem particularly obvious. Does the Ryder Cup (in golf) ease tensions between the USA and Europe? I have never heard politicians saying that the Tour de France (in cycling) has helped reduce international tensions. Certainly, sporting events like these bring people together from a variety of nations to enjoy their love of sport, but I think that taking this to mean that such events are ‘essential’ in easing international tensions is going too far. In conclusion, international sporting events are all well and good, but do not contribute greatly to world peace.
I completely disagree with the opinion that
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international
sporting
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events
are essential in easing
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international
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tensions
and shall outline my reasons in this essay.

International
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tensions
are caused
by
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many
things, including political differences, religious issues and inequalities in levels of economic development. Sporting
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events
are temporary and
clearly
have
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little
or no advantageous effect on
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international
relations. The Beijing Olympics, which
were hailed
as a wonderful opportunity to
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improve
China’s relations with other countries, have
apparently
done nothing to
further
its relations with Japan. North Korea’s participation in the 2010 World Cup has not led to any decrease in the
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dangerous
level of
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tension
between that country and South Korea and the United States.
Indeed
, each side will no doubt say that this is the fault of the other, thereby
possibly
increasing tensions!

Sporting
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events
have been
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used
as opportunities for certain groups of
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people
to increase
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international
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tensions
. In 1972, the Munich Olympics
were hijacked
by Palestinian terrorists and the
extremely
high levels of security at the Beijing Games
are bound
to
be repeated
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–
or even raised
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–
for the London Olympics. To then suggest that such sporting
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events
are essential to decrease
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international
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tensions
seems to me to completely
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ignore
history.

Having said this, I do
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think
that
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international
sporting
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events
could
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ease
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tensions
,
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but
the link doesn’t seem
particularly
obvious. Does the Ryder Cup (in golf)
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ease
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tensions
between the USA and Europe? I have never heard politicians saying that the Tour de France (in cycling) has
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helped
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reduce
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international
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tensions
.
Certainly
, sporting
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events
like these bring
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people
together from a variety of nations to enjoy their
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love
of sport,
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but
I
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think
that taking this to mean that such
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events
are ‘essential’ in easing
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international
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tensions
is going too far.

In conclusion
,
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international
sporting
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events
are all well and
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good
,
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but
do not contribute
greatly
to world peace.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
314 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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