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The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school is planned for the area. The map shows to possible sites for the school. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school is planned for the area. The map shows to possible sites for the school.
Disposing of debris has become a humungous problem to society. Because there are no proper measures to discharge the waste. In this essay I shall discuss my view about the increase in garbage collection and I shall also discuss on ways the government can do to reduce the waste collection. In my opinion, the major factor in the increase of the garbage is population. Because usage in proportional to wastage. As more and more people use things, disposable items will also be more. For example, according to a recent study at the university of California, in the country like India, where population is around 1500 Crore and daily waste collected is around 2000 tones. Another, the main issue is there are no good recovery measures taken to maintain the balance in the ecosystem. As a result, things which are not biodegradable, are converted as permanent waste. To illustrate, a nuclear family of 3 members produces nearly 20% of plastic waste which becomes as an indissoluble waste which in turn pollutes the earth. In order to control this high volume of garbage collection the government should come up with some measures. Firstly, the government should put a ban on products which are not eco-friendly like plastic covers, plastic cups, straw. Instead of that they should promote the products made of biodegradable products. Secondly, they should install re-cycle machines in all the areas and make rule to dispose all the waste only in those machines. And people who fail to do that should be penalised. To illustrate, in Iran people who litter on roads are penalised for 5000$ and they also have the imprisonment for 2 years. In conclusion, main reasons for collection of garbage is due to increase in population and lack of re-cycle measures. The Government should act on this by banning the plastic products and by providing the re-cycle machines where ever possible.
Disposing of debris has become a humungous problem to society.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
there are no proper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
measures
to discharge the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
. In this essay I shall discuss my view about the increase in garbage collection and I shall
also
discuss on ways the
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government
can do to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
collection.

In my opinion, the major factor in the increase of the garbage is population.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
usage in proportional to wastage. As more and more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
things, disposable items will
also
be more.
For example
, according to a recent study at the
If the term is a proper noun, use the suggested capitalization.
university of California
, in the country like India, where population is around 1500 Crore and daily
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
collected is around 2000 tones. Another, the main issue is there are no
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
recovery
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
measures
taken to maintain the balance in the ecosystem.
As a result
, things which are not biodegradable,
are converted
as permanent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
. To illustrate, a nuclear family of 3 members produces
nearly
20% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
which becomes as an indissoluble
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
which in turn pollutes the earth.

In order to control this high volume of garbage collection the
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government
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
up with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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measures
.
Firstly
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should put a ban on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
which are not eco-friendly like
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
covers,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
cups, straw.
Instead
of that they should promote the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
made of biodegradable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
Secondly
, they should install re-cycle machines in all the areas and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rule
to dispose all the
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waste
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
in those machines. And
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people
who fail to do that should be
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penalised
. To illustrate, in Iran
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who litter on roads are
Possible spelling mistake. 'penalised' is British English.
penalised
for
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
5000$ and
they
also
have the imprisonment for 2 years.

In conclusion
, main reasons for collection of garbage is due to increase in population and lack of re-cycle
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
measures
. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Government
should act on this by banning the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
and by providing the re-cycle machines where ever possible.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school is planned for the area. The map shows to possible sites for the school.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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