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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the Supermarket. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the Supermarket.
Money and incentive can be considered as one of the key takeaways for a job. For all employees, their idea of a good job always considers good incentives and at the same time, the management always expects good work from their members of staff. Providing a raise in the salary or other monetary benefits always plays to the satisfaction of both the parties involved, as the employer encourages excellence which is one of their requirements and the workforce responds by giving their best in their operation. However, as is the case with a lot of approaches to improve workforce throughput, there are some disadvantages to this approach. Such a pecuniary outlook has the tendency to disorient the workplace as the other employees are susceptible to feel bad about themselves. For example, in a normal workplace, every person has the right to believe that their work plays a big part in the organization's growth. When some people are selected for their efficiency, it might paint a bad picture that specifies that the others are not as efficient as the chosen few. Also, identifying and selecting the people who contribute more to the institution can also backfire when done wrongly. I would say that such money-based incentives should be encouraged only when there is a solid ground in which the people can be judged in. For instance, the number of tickets handled by people in a Customer Service environment is a very good metric to be used here. This number will always be a solid one for each of the individuals and the tickets are open for all involved people. In conclusion, I believe that providing monetary benefits can greatly improve and enhance the organization's growth, but at the same time, the management must ensure that these benefits are not provided for abstract goals which might cause controversy later on.
Money and incentive can
be considered
as one of the key takeaways for a job. For all employees, their
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idea
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job always considers
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incentives and at the same time, the management always
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expects
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good
work from their members of staff. Providing a raise in the salary or other monetary benefits always plays to the satisfaction of both the parties involved, as the employer encourages excellence which is one of their requirements and the workforce responds by giving their best in their operation.

However
, as is the case with
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a lot of
approaches to
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improve
workforce throughput, there are
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some
disadvantages to this approach. Such a pecuniary outlook has the tendency to disorient the workplace as the other employees are susceptible to feel
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bad
about themselves.
For example
, in a normal workplace, every person has the right to believe that their work plays a
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big
part in the organization's growth. When
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some
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people
are selected
for their efficiency, it might paint a
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bad
picture that specifies that the others are not as efficient as the chosen few.
Also
, identifying and selecting the
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people
who contribute more to the institution can
also
backfire when done
wrongly
.

I would say that such money-based incentives should
be encouraged
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only
when there is a solid ground in which the
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people
can
be judged
in.
For instance
, the number of tickets handled by
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people
in a Customer Service environment is a
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very
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metric to be
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used
here. This number will always be a solid one for each of the individuals and the tickets are open for all involved
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people
.

In conclusion
, I believe that providing monetary benefits can
greatly
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improve
and enhance the organization's growth,
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but
at the same time, the management
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must
ensure that these benefits are not provided for abstract goals which might cause controversy later on.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the Supermarket.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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