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You are looking for a part time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter: Introduce yourselfExplain what experience and special skills you haveTell him/her when you think you could start. v.1

You are looking for a part time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter: Introduce yourselfExplain what experience and special skills you haveTell him/her when you think you could start. v. 1
Online shopping is being accepted and booming in the contemporary world. It is often debated about the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping. Definitely, advantages of e-commerce is significant that its disadvantages. In this essay, some points to prove this statement is being put forward. Firstly, buying things online has made the hassle of shopping much easier for the public. From medicine to grocery, there is no item which is unavailable on the website. We are able to get anything we want in one click without getting out of the house. An interesting fact is, people are into online shopping is because of its high rate of affordability. There are end numbers of websites which provides a platform for online shopping. Moreover, there is also an opportunity to buy anything from any part of the world, despite the fact that we need not be in the same country while getting it. Hence, this makes an item easily accessible for people all around the globe. Secondly, there are many places in the world where most of the internationally branded items are unavailable. For example, In south India, only the major cities have good shopping centres and complexes. Therefore, websites like Amazon and Flipkart makes it easy for them shop branded products online. Another interesting fact is, all these international brands as well provide door step delivery when ordered online which in turn develops this business sector. Although, there are a few disadvantages of the products bought online, it is still used by 90% of the population from all the developed and developing countries. For example, Some products bought online seems to have a damage or are of low quality. These days, this issue is being addressed by the website and provides the customer with refund or replacing the item free of cost. Hence, This negative point can be neglected. To conclude, online shopping is a new step into the growing world. Everyone should accept this method of purchasing products since we should all accept the truth that we are living in a world conquered by technology and it is impossible to deny that. Hence, Trusting these developments is crucial.
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shopping
is being
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accepted
and booming in the contemporary
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world
. It is
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often
debated about the advantages and disadvantages of
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online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
. Definitely, advantages of e-commerce is significant that its disadvantages. In this essay,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
points to prove this statement is
being put
forward.

Firstly
, buying things
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
has made the hassle of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
much easier for the public. From medicine to grocery, there is no
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
item
which is unavailable on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
website
. We are able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
anything we want in one click without getting out of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
. An interesting fact is,
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people
are into
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online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
is
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because
of its high rate of affordability. There are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
numbers of websites which provides a platform for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
.
Moreover
, there is
also
an opportunity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
anything from any part of the
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world
, despite the fact that we need not be in the same country while getting it.
Hence
, this
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makes
an
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item
easily
accessible for
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people
all around the globe.

Secondly
, there are
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many
places in the
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world
where most of the
internationally
branded
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items
are unavailable.
For example
, In south India,
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only
the major cities have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
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shopping
Possible spelling mistake. 'centres' is British English.
centres
and complexes.
Therefore
, websites like Amazon and Flipkart
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
it easy for them shop branded
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products
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online
. Another interesting fact is, all these international brands
as well
provide door step delivery when ordered
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online
which in turn develops this business sector.

Although, there are a few disadvantages of the
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products
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
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online
, it is
still
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
by 90% of the population from all the developed and
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developing countries
.
For example
,
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Some
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products
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
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online
seems to have a damage or are of low quality. These days, this issue is
being addressed
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
website
and provides the customer with refund or replacing the
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item
free of cost.
Hence
, This
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
point can
be neglected
.

To conclude
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
is a new step into the growing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
. Everyone should accept this method of purchasing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
since we should all accept the truth that we are living in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
conquered by technology and it is impossible to deny that.
Hence
, Trusting these developments is crucial.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You are looking for a part time job at a football club. Write a letter to the manager of the football club. In your letter: Introduce yourselfExplain what experience and special skills you haveTell him/her when you think you could start. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
358 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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