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You share a parking area with several neighbors and have recently started having problems. Explain the problemsSuggesting ways to help the situationProposing a possible meeting v.1

You share a parking area with several neighbors and have recently started having problems. Explain the problemsSuggesting ways to help the situationProposing a possible meeting v. 1
It is irrefutable that the crime rate is increasing everywhere around the globe to mammoth rate. It is commonly argued that if an individual commit lawlessness, he will be criminally for the lifetime. In my opinion, I agree to this statement, this essay will discuss the argument in detail. To begin with, once a person resort to illegal activity, it becomes his obsession to commit it. Sometimes when an individual perform some action, and make it as his routine work, one continue to do so. For example, my friend had an inclination of stealing stationary of other students. He was once caught while robbing the pencil, but he still continued it as it had become his habit. Overall, good manners are vital and bad habits can lead to criminality. Secondly, society makes encourages to become a criminal. Prisoner once commit misconduct and leave the prison, but the society does not accept him. No one prefers them to offer a job. Thus, to satisfy his financial need, they again resort to misdeeds. For instance, in a recent survey it is found that 90% of offenders commit scandals again after they are released from the jail. In short, people do not accept individuals committing atrocity as they consider them risky for their life. To conclude, crime is rising at an exponential rate. This essay discussed how a person become criminal for the lifetime once he perform illegal activity. In my view, I agree to this fact that conducting illegal things against the law has become detrimental to life. Therefore, never commit the crime.
It is irrefutable that the crime rate is increasing everywhere around the globe to mammoth rate. It is
commonly
argued that if an individual
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commit
lawlessness, he will be
criminally
for the lifetime. In my opinion, I
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agree
to this statement, this essay will discuss the argument in detail.

To
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begin
with,
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once
a person resort to illegal activity, it
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becomes
his obsession to
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commit
it.
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Sometimes
when an individual perform
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some
action, and
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make
it as his routine work, one continue to do
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so
.
For example
, my friend had an inclination of stealing stationary of other students. He was
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once
caught while robbing the pencil,
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but
he
still
continued it as it had
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become
his habit.
Overall
,
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good
manners are vital and
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bad
habits can lead to criminality.

Secondly
, society
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makes
encourages to
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become
a criminal. Prisoner
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once
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commit
misconduct and
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leave
the prison,
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but
the society does not accept him. No one prefers them to offer a job.
Thus
, to satisfy his financial need, they again resort to misdeeds.
For instance
, in a recent survey it
is found
that 90% of offenders
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commit
scandals again after they
are released
from the jail. In short,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
do not accept individuals committing atrocity as they consider them risky for their life.

To conclude
, crime is rising at an exponential rate. This essay discussed how a person
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become
criminal for the lifetime
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once
he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "performs", "performed".
perform
illegal activity. In my view, I
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agree
to this fact that conducting illegal things against the law has
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become
detrimental to life.
Therefore
, never
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commit
the crime.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You share a parking area with several neighbors and have recently started having problems. Explain the problemsSuggesting ways to help the situationProposing a possible meeting v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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