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You share a parking area with several neighbors and have recently started having problems Write a letter to be copied to all neighbours that share the parking area In that letter 1 Explain the problems 2 Suggest ways to help the situation 3 Propose a meet v.1

You share a parking area with several neighbors and have recently started having problems Write a letter to be copied to all neighbours that share the parking area In that letter 1 Explain the problems 2 Suggest ways to help the situation 3 Propose a meet v. 1
In these days, most of the people's health issues come from consuming too much unhealthy junk food; as a result, the government is considering to rise the tax on it to discourage people from eating such food. According to my perspective, this government role cannot serve the whole problem and it will affect to only groups of people. Imposing a higher tax on fast food may reduce the number of patients with obesity, diabetes, and heart disease resulting from being overweighted. However, as we know that pre-prepared food is cheap and convenient; therefore, the higher price of fast food obviously creates drawback to the low-incomed labour. For example, it is not only forcing them to buy more expensive food, but also sometimes imposing them to prepare the food themselves instead, which is the wasting of time and less comfort. Moreover, this government measure will definitely not work at all for those who is wealthy or do not have any financial issues that they are going to continue purchasing this expensive unhealthy food. On the other hand, the government role on only increasing tax cannot develop public's health and make them become stronger. Eating less junk food can only prevent people from overweighting due to its high contained saturated fat sugar and salt. Thus, to reduce the nation's health condition, the government should launch other measures to promote healthier lifestyle as well. For instance, providing the unpaid exercise equipment in the public areas and cutting off the tax on healthy food such as fresh fruits and vegetables. In conclusion, despite of taxing fast food, in my opinion, it does not enough and also undergoes some groups of people. Hence, in order to reduce the number of ill people, other measuring steps should be used along with it.
In these days, most of the
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people
's health issues
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come
from consuming too much unhealthy junk
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food
;
as a result
, the
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government
is considering to rise the
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tax
on it to discourage
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people
from eating such
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food
. According to my perspective, this
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government
role cannot serve the whole problem and it will affect to
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only
groups of
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people
.

Imposing a higher
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tax
on
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fast
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food
may
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reduce
the number of patients with obesity, diabetes, and heart disease resulting from being
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overweighted
.
However
, as we know that
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pre-prepared
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food
is
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cheap
and convenient;
therefore
, the higher price of
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fast
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food
obviously
creates drawback to the
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low-incomed
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labour
.
For example
, it is not
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only
forcing them to
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buy
more expensive
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food
,
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but
also
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sometimes
imposing them to prepare the
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food
themselves
instead
, which is the wasting of time and less comfort.
Moreover
, this
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government
measure will definitely not work at all for those who is wealthy or do not have any financial issues that they are going to continue purchasing this expensive unhealthy food.

On the other hand
, the
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government
role on
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only
increasing
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tax
cannot develop public's health and
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make
them become stronger. Eating less junk
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food
can
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only
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prevent
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people
from
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overweighting
due to its high contained saturated
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fat
sugar and salt.
Thus
, to
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reduce
the nation's health condition, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should launch other measures to promote healthier lifestyle
as well
.
For instance
, providing the unpaid exercise equipment in the public areas and cutting off the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tax
on healthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
such as fresh fruits and vegetables.

In conclusion
,
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despite of
taxing
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fast
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food
, in my opinion, it does not
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enough
and
also
undergoes
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some
groups of
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people
.
Hence
, in order to
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reduce
the number of ill
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people
, other measuring steps should be
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used
along with it.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay You share a parking area with several neighbors and have recently started having problems Write a letter to be copied to all neighbours that share the parking area In that letter 1 Explain the problems 2 Suggest ways to help the situation 3 Propose a meet v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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