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~2020-01-07: Task 1 You ride a bicycle to work, but there is a problem with the parking. Write a letter to the building manger to provide bicycle parking. In your letter, you should: • why you ride a bicycle to work • what the problem is with the parking • what your suggest are. v.1

~2020-01-07: Task 1 You ride a bicycle to work, but there is a problem with the parking. Write a letter to the building manger to provide bicycle parking. In your letter, you should: • why you ride a bicycle to work • what the problem is with the parking • what your suggest are. v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter with regard to the unavailability of a parking area for bicycles near the building premises. I am a resident of this building for the past 9 years, and my apartment number is A-27. Since my work is in downtown I have to commute through different modes in order to reach my office. Moreover, this had become extremely tedious, and also expensive. Therefore, I have instigated to travel to my office through cycles as it more efficient and convenient for me. Furthermore, in the midst of this I hardly got time to engross myself in any physical activity. Hence, for instance, this would also act as an extra curricula activity in my schedule which is beneficial for my physical health as well. However, it has come to my attention that there is no parking stand for bicycles in the entire building. Moreover, many owners who have a bicycle, either park it on the footpath or besides any other vehicles. Additionally, due to lack of safety many complain of theft and damage. Similarly, the cycles parked along side other automobiles also tend to damage it from scratches and dents. Overall, I would kindly request you provide a space for parking cycles. If I may, there have a few suggestions, for example, installing a parking stand near our building would be appreciated, also the space besides the main gate of the building can be utilized for it to be installed. I hope you could understand the situation and take actions favourably. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours truly,
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter with regard to the unavailability of a
parking
area for bicycles near the
building
premises. I am a resident of this
building
for the past 9 years, and my apartment number is A-27.
Since
my work is in downtown I
have to
commute through
different
modes in order to reach my office.
Moreover
, this had become
extremely
tedious, and
also
expensive.
Therefore
, I have instigated to travel to my office through cycles as it more efficient and convenient for me.
Furthermore
, in the midst of this I hardly
got
time to engross myself in any physical activity.
Hence
,
for instance
, this would
also
act as an extra curricula activity in my schedule which is beneficial for my physical health
as well
.

However
, it has
come
to my attention that there is no
parking
stand for bicycles in the entire
building
.
Moreover
,
many
owners who have a bicycle, either park it on the footpath or
besides
any other vehicles.
Additionally
, due to lack of safety
many
complain of theft and damage.
Similarly
, the cycles parked
along side
other automobiles
also
tend to damage it from scratches and dents.

Overall
, I would kindly request you provide a space for
parking
cycles. If I may, there have a few suggestions,
for example
, installing a
parking
stand near our
building
would
be appreciated
,
also
the space
besides
the main gate of the
building
can
be utilized
for it to
be installed
. I hope you could understand the situation and take actions
favourably
.

I am looking forward to hearing from you
soon
.

Yours
truly
,
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay ~2020-01-07: Task 1 You ride a bicycle to work, but there is a problem with the parking. Write a letter to the building manger to provide bicycle parking. In your letter, you should: • why you ride a bicycle to work • what the problem is with the parking • what your suggest are. v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
268 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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