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Describe an advertisement that you saw or heard recently. Please say - What is the name of the advertisement? - Explain what it is about. - Why did you remember this advertisement? v.1

Describe an advertisement that you saw or heard recently. Please say - What is the name of the advertisement? - Explain what it is about. - Why did you remember this advertisement? v. 1
Newspapers should not publish any news that is related to the personal life of any politician. I completely agree with this school of thought because it hampers their privacy, and work and private lives have no relevance to each other, so only the necessary information should be made public. Firstly, every person, be it a politician, deals with one or the other personal issue in life. However, if this issue is made public through any medium, it seriously affects their self-pride, and which is ethically a wrong thing to happen with anyone. For example, recently a well-known Indian politician, Mr. Kailash Vijayvwargiya, filed a complaint against media for leaking his personal life information in the newspapers and T. V, which had affected his social-life drastically. Moreover, as the professional and personal life of a politician is different, newspapers should focus on publishing only that news which is important for the public to know. That is to say that people are concerned about their country’s welfare and therefore newspapers should print information that can show them if the concerned politician is working for them or not, instead of letting them know about the politician’s private-affairs. For instance, in the 2019 election, The Times of India printed that as Mr. Amit Shah, the Home-Minister of India, is not well, he will not be able to attend his daughter’s marriage. This news was redundant as it was not relevant to the elections, nor did it show any connection to the work that Mr. Amit Shah did for the nation. In conclusion, newspapers should stop printing irrelevant news about private lives of politicians as it is ethically wrong to publicly leak personal information of anyone, and a politician’s work for the nation and their personal life has no connection, therefore, it is unnecessary to publish about their private lives.
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life
of any
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politician
. I completely
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agree
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thought
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because
it hampers their privacy, and work and private
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lives
have no relevance to each other,
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so
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only
the necessary
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information
should
be made
public.

Firstly
, every person, be it a
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politician
, deals with one or the other
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personal
issue in
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life
.
However
, if this issue
is made
public through any medium, it
seriously
affects their self-pride, and which is
ethically
a
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wrong
thing to happen
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with
anyone.
For example
, recently a well-known Indian
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politician
, Mr.
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Kailash
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Vijayvwargiya
, filed a complaint against media for leaking his
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personal
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life
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information
in the
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newspapers
and T. V, which had
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affected
his social-life
drastically
.

Moreover
, as the professional and
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personal
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life
of a
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politician
is
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different
,
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newspapers
should focus on publishing
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only
that
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news
which is
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important
for the public to know.
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to say that
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people
are concerned
about their country’s welfare and
therefore
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newspapers
should print
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information
that can
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show
them if the concerned
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politician
is working for them or not,
instead
of letting them know about the
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politician’s
private-affairs.
For instance
, in the 2019 election, The Times of India printed that as Mr. Amit Shah, the Home-Minister of India, is not well, he will not be able to attend his daughter’s marriage. This
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news
was redundant as it was not relevant to the elections, nor did it
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show
any connection to the work that Mr. Amit Shah did for the nation.

In conclusion
,
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newspapers
should
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stop
printing irrelevant
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news
about private
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lives
of
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politicians
as it is
ethically
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wrong
to
publicly
leak
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personal
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information
of anyone, and a
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politician’s
work for the nation and their
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personal
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life
has no connection,
therefore
, it is unnecessary to publish about their private
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lives
.
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IELTS essay Describe an advertisement that you saw or heard recently. Please say - What is the name of the advertisement? - Explain what it is about. - Why did you remember this advertisement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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