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1413 What sorts of exercise do you not like doing? Well, I think. . . tennis is hate for playing because of some reasons. It needs plenty of steps when you want to play the right way such as holding a tennis racket. I dislike a part of playing tennis due to v.1

1413 What sorts of exercise do you not like doing? Well, I think. . . tennis is hate for playing because of some reasons. It needs plenty of steps when you want to play the right way such as holding a tennis racket. I dislike a part of playing tennis due to v. 1
A country society is a combination of people with a huge range of age with interactions among all divisions which hold the union whole the country. Admittedly, the inhabitant of a territory is involved the youths and the old ages. Whether the youngest society seems to be far better than the elder ones, nevertheless, there are some worries about these conditions. On the one hand, young people have better performance as the workforce and their productivity have superiority rather than aged persons. Also, the powerful military forces in global sight have performed by young armed services. Furthermore a young nation is a happy and joyful nation, at least at 90 percent of the surveys. Moreover, science and technology produce and eventually the country’s future are guaranteed by youth crowds. On the other hand, young countries have own hardships and problems which governments have concerned by those toughness. Firstly, providing jobs becoming the worth thinkable problem for administrations with extended young populace. Secondly, the cost of marriage and housing commitment are two major issues in developing countries with a positive population growth rate. Ultimately, the optimistic prospects and perspective of the time ahead for young descendants, is a matter that we ought not to underestimate. In overall terms, it seems for governments, the young citizens have excelled to an aging population, because of their benefits and perks. Although it might be a challenge in the short-term, but it is profitable for the long-term. Thus, according to what we said above, because of not having encounters with old overcrowded side effects, such as insurance payments, retirement, health caring, the dwindle of residents and reproduction, the priority of lawmakers is the youngest nation absolutely.
A
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country
society is a combination of
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people
with a huge range of age with interactions among all divisions which hold the union whole the
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country
.
Admittedly
, the inhabitant of a territory
is involved
the youths and the
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old
ages. Whether the youngest society seems to be far better than the elder ones,
nevertheless
, there are
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some
worries about these conditions.

On the one hand,
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young
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people
have better performance as the workforce and their productivity have superiority
rather
than aged persons.
Also
, the powerful military forces in global sight have performed by
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young
armed services.
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Furthermore
a
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young
nation is a happy and joyful nation, at least at 90 percent of the surveys.
Moreover
, science and technology produce and
eventually
the
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country’s
future
are guaranteed
by youth crowds.

On the other hand
,
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young
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countries
have
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own
hardships and problems which
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governments
have concerned by
Did you mean "this toughness" or "those toughnesses"?
those toughness
.
Firstly
, providing jobs becoming the worth thinkable problem for administrations with extended
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young
populace.
Secondly
, the cost of marriage and housing commitment are two major issues in developing
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countries
with a
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positive
population growth rate.
Ultimately
, the optimistic prospects and perspective of the time ahead for
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young
descendants, is a matter that we ought not to underestimate.

In
overall
terms, it seems for
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governments
, the
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young
citizens have excelled to an aging population,
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because
of their benefits and perks. Although it might be a challenge in the short-term,
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but
it is profitable for the long-term.
Thus
, according to what we said above,
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because
of not having encounters with
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old
overcrowded side effects, such as insurance payments, retirement, health caring,
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the dwindle
of residents and reproduction, the priority of lawmakers is the youngest nation
absolutely
.
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IELTS essay 1413 What sorts of exercise do you not like doing? Well, I think. . . tennis is hate for playing because of some reasons. It needs plenty of steps when you want to play the right way such as holding a tennis racket. I dislike a part of playing tennis due to v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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