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You saw a person that you knew in a newspaper which you have no contact for a very long time. Write to the editor and in your letter include: Tell how you knew that personWhat do you want to tell that personTell how the editor can help you contact that per v.1

You saw a person that you knew in a newspaper which you have no contact for a very long time. Write to the editor and in your letter include: Tell how you knew that personWhat do you want to tell that personTell how the editor can help you contact that per v. 1
Nowadays, technology has evolved enough that, it affects our daily activities like meeting and talking. In addition to this, there are various other relations which are also touched. This essay will discuss that, why this is a negative development. This phenomenon can be seen in youngsters. Birthday wishes were done before by meeting with each other physically and by cutting cakes. It has changed now days, they celebrate this by wishing via messages or calls. People are becoming lethargic so they will select the easiest way to accomplish the task. For example, teenagers celebrate their friend`s birthday by posting on their social media instead of wishing by handshakes. This also reflects in our next generations. Children are subservient, so they are doing exactly what others are doing. Due to this, they will make so many friends in the social media, but they would not be able to make the real friends. Similarly, this can also be seen in adults. They send wedding or any ceremony invitation card through messages because they think that, this is easiest and fastest way to do this work. They also think that they will save so much time and fuel. This would make their relationship weaker. If they do this by visiting a relative`s house, they could make the relationship stronger with them. If they will keep doing this every time, this will become their habit and this would reflect in their daily activities. In conclusion, technology is to make our life easier and simpler, but if we use them where we are not supposed to do, we would lose some relations. To avoid things like this, the use of gadgets should be limited to some extent.
Nowadays, technology has evolved
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enough
that, it affects our daily activities like meeting and talking.
In addition
to this, there are various other relations which are
also
touched. This essay will discuss that, why this is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
development.

This phenomenon can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
in youngsters. Birthday wishes
were done
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before
by meeting with each other
physically
and by cutting cakes. It has
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changed
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now
days, they celebrate this by wishing via messages or calls.
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People
are becoming lethargic
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so
they will select the easiest way to accomplish the task.
For example
,
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teenagers
celebrate their
The character between 'friend' and 's' is an accent character, not a standard apostrophe character. Use "friend’s" (curly apostrophe) or "friend's" (straight apostrophe).
friend`s
birthday by posting on their social media
instead
of wishing by handshakes. This
also
reflects in our
next
generations. Children are subservient,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they are doing exactly what others are doing. Due to this, they will
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make
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so
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many
friends in the social media,
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but
they would not be able to
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make
the real friends.

Similarly
, this can
also
be
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seen
in adults. They
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send
wedding or any ceremony invitation card through messages
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because
they
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think
that, this is easiest and fastest way to do this work. They
also
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think
that they will save
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so
much time and fuel. This would
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
their relationship weaker. If they do this by visiting a
The character between 'relative' and 's' is an accent character, not a standard apostrophe character. Use "relative’s" (curly apostrophe) or "relative's" (straight apostrophe).
relative`s
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house
, they could
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make
the relationship stronger with them. If they will
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keep
doing this every time, this will become their habit and this would reflect in their daily activities.

In conclusion
, technology is to
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make
our life easier and simpler,
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but
if we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
them where we are not supposed to do, we would lose
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
relations. To avoid things like this, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of gadgets should
be limited
to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extent.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay You saw a person that you knew in a newspaper which you have no contact for a very long time. Write to the editor and in your letter include: Tell how you knew that personWhat do you want to tell that personTell how the editor can help you contact that per v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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