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You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter to the editor. In your letter: •Say which edition and when did the article appear•Explain why you lost contact with v.2

You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter to the editor. In your letter: •Say which edition and when did the article appear•Explain why you lost contact with v. 2
The teenage years are considered by certain demographics of society as the happiest epoch of most people’s lives, while others believe that adulthood brings more joy. In the first, adolescents have the advantage of think in fewer problems, whereas adults can get freedom economics to decide whatever they want. In my view, the best years are between 25 to 30, for the reason that you start to come true your dreams. Many persons remember their young hood as a great period, due to in this time they could make several good friends, which are in touch until those days. Besides, in the epoch between 14 to 20 years, overall parents have the responsibility to respond to the economic support of their children. Nevertheless, for this same reason, they do not have the freedom about their own decisions. For example, when I was young, I saw how some fellows could not go to the parties, because they did not the permission of their parents. On the other hand, others argued that adult life is more happier. One of the reasons of this is because in this epoch, people start to do reality their main goals, hence they feel complete as a person. For instance, in this period the majority finish their university studies, get a job, can travel, and have a serious relationship. However, in this age can bring troubles such as stress and a weak health, for the strong effort to achieve their dreams. In conclusion, the decision about what time of life is happiest depend on the experience of each individual. I am convinced that the best years are in the adulthood, because you are still a physically attractive person and you have the experience which makes you smarter.
The teenage years
are considered
by certain demographics of society as the happiest epoch of most
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people
’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
, while others believe that adulthood brings more joy. In the
first
, adolescents have the advantage of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
in fewer problems, whereas adults can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
freedom economics to decide whatever they want. In my view, the best years are
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 25 and 30".
between 25 to 30
, for the reason that you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
true your dreams.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
persons remember their young hood as a great period, due to in this time they could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
several
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
friends, which are in touch until those days.
Besides
, in the epoch
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 14 and 20".
between 14 to 20
years,
overall
parents have the responsibility to respond to the economic support of their children.
Nevertheless
, for this same reason, they do not have the freedom about their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
decisions.
For example
, when I was young, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
how
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
fellows could not go to the parties,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they did not the permission of their parents.

On the other hand
, others argued that adult life is
Use only "happier" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
more happier
. One of the reasons of this is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
in this epoch,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to do reality their main goals,
hence
they feel complete as a person.
For instance
, in this period the majority finish their university studies,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a job, can travel, and have a serious relationship.
However
, in this age can bring troubles such as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
and a weak health, for the strong effort to achieve their dreams.

In conclusion
, the decision about what time of life is happiest depend on the experience of each individual. I
am convinced
that the best years are in the adulthood,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
you are
still
a
physically
attractive person and you have the experience which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
you smarter.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
The most intimate temper of a people, its deepest soul, is above all in its language.
Jules Michelet

IELTS essay You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter to the editor. In your letter: •Say which edition and when did the article appear•Explain why you lost contact with v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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