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You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter to the editor. In your letter: •Say which edition and when did the article appear•Explain why you lost contact with v.4

You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter to the editor. In your letter: •Say which edition and when did the article appear•Explain why you lost contact with v. 4
Most of the high paid jobs are dominated by males. A section of people believe that a certain amount of high level jobs should be reserved for females as well. However, few people oppose this idea. I will scrutinize both aspects before forming any opinion at the end. To embark on, our globe is man dominated in most of the sectors. So, it is quite obvious that high paid jobs will be captured by men. However, to have healthy society, we must encourage our female colleague to stand for high managerial jobs. For this, government must intervene and must take many steps. Firstly, in schools or in colleges certain portion of seats must be kept for females. This will help girls to enroll in streams like science, engineering etc. Secondly, in job sectors man-woman workforce must be fixed. For instance, to empower women, Indian government has fixed male-female ratio to 8: 2 i. e. 20% reserved for women. Lastly, many events can be organised, specially for females, like science projects, innovation idea competition. It is observed that in field of science of technology, girls are given less importance. These initiative will definitely help women to showcase their talent and will be able to lead high level jobs such as CEO, MD and minister. However, few people believe that reservation will create detrimental effect in our society. Mentally, men and women are same. Everyone can reach top position of an organization if he or she has capability. Reservation may deprive a worthy male candidate from getting a high paid job. To recapitulate, reservation for women might be a good idea in school to encourage girls to get seats in competitive subjects. However, in jobs reservation should not be entertained as capable candidate will definitely reach the highest level.
Most of the
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high
paid
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jobs
are dominated
by males. A section of
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people
believe that a certain amount of
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high
level
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jobs
should
be reserved
for
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females
as well
.
However
, few
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people
oppose this
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idea
. I will scrutinize both aspects
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before
forming any opinion at the
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end
.

To embark on, our globe is
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man
dominated in most of the sectors.
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So
, it is quite obvious that
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high
paid
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jobs
will
be captured
by
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men
.
However
, to have healthy society, we
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must
encourage our
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female
colleague to stand for
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high
managerial
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jobs
. For this,
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government
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must
intervene and
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must
take
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many
steps.
Firstly
, in schools or in colleges certain portion of seats
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must
be
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kept
for
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females
. This will
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help
girls to enroll in streams like science, engineering etc.
Secondly
, in
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job
sectors
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man
-woman workforce
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must
be
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fixed
.
For instance
, to empower
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women
, Indian
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government
has
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fixed
male-female ratio to 8: 2
There should be no space here: "i.e.".
i. e.
20% reserved for
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women
.
Lastly
,
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many
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events
can be
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organised
,
specially
for
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females
, like science projects, innovation
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idea
competition. It
is observed
that in field of science of technology, girls are
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given
less importance. These initiative will definitely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
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women
to showcase their talent and will be able to lead
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high
level
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jobs
such as CEO, MD and minister.

However
, few
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people
believe that
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reservation
will create detrimental effect in our society. Mentally,
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men
and
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women
are same. Everyone can reach top position of an organization if he or she has capability.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Reservation
may deprive a worthy male candidate from getting a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
high
paid job.

To recapitulate,
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reservation
for
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women
might be a
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good
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
in school to encourage girls to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
seats in competitive subjects.
However
, in
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jobs
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reservation
should not
be entertained
as capable candidate will definitely reach the highest level.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter to the editor. In your letter: •Say which edition and when did the article appear•Explain why you lost contact with v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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