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Writing task 1You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter to the editor. In your letter: •Say which edition and when did the article appear•Explain why you lost v.1

Writing task 1You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter to the editor. In your letter: •Say which edition and when did the article appear•Explain why you lost v. 1
Television is one of the wonderful discoveries which brings the images into motion and soundtrack thus giving altogether a different perspective to the visual experience. It's often a debate about its worth for the children with critics highlighting the negative shades. I strongly believe that it helps in moulding the social, personal and intellectual capabilities of younger children. Firstly, the current affairs programs not only help them to be updated on the latest information and also they will understand the viewpoint of the world leaders and their traits. For example, the BBC news relaying the speech of honourable president, not only help them to develop their interpersonal skills, but also the etiquette and finesse. This will surely help them to be a better equipped for social life ahead. Secondly, it helps them to develop the spirit of healthy competition and co-operation. For example, after watching the team games where they see legends fighting hard along with their teammates to win the games, but still maintaining the harmony during and after the match by playing within the rules defined by the games. This not only teaches them a competitive spirit, but also how to take negative things in the stride. Finally, the educational theme-based series not only teaches them the concepts, but also gives the young minds the reasoning thus inculcating a strong logical bend of mind which enhances their analytical power and makes them better at the judgment. For example, the discovery channel helps them in understanding the ocean salinity and also the science behind the mechanism. In conclusion, I feel that television programs can leave an everlasting imprint on the children to be a well rounded citizen.
Television is one of the wonderful discoveries which brings the images into motion and soundtrack
thus
giving altogether a
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different
perspective to the visual experience. It's
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often
a debate about its worth for the children with critics highlighting the
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negative
shades. I
strongly
believe that it
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helps
in
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moulding
the social, personal and intellectual capabilities of younger children.

Firstly
, the
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current
affairs programs not
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only
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help
them to
be updated
on the latest information and
also
they will understand the viewpoint of the world leaders and their traits.
For example
, the BBC news relaying the speech of
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honourable
president, not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
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help
them to develop their interpersonal
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skills
,
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but
also
the etiquette and finesse. This will
surely
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help
them to be a better equipped for social life ahead.

Secondly
, it
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
helps
them to develop the spirit of healthy competition and co-operation.
For example
, after watching the team games where they
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see
legends fighting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
along with their teammates to win the games,
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but
still
maintaining the harmony during and after the match by playing within the
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rules
defined by the games. This not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
teaches them a competitive spirit,
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but
also
how to take
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negative
things in the stride.

Finally
, the educational theme-based series not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
teaches them the concepts,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
gives the young minds the reasoning
thus
inculcating a strong logical bend of mind which enhances their analytical power and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
them better at the judgment.
For example
, the discovery channel
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
helps
them in understanding the ocean salinity and
also
the science behind the mechanism.

In conclusion
, I feel that television programs can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
an everlasting imprint on the children to be a
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well rounded
citizen.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Writing task 1You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter to the editor. In your letter: •Say which edition and when did the article appear•Explain why you lost v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
278 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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