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You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time Write a letter to the editor In your letter Say which edition and when did the article appear Explain why you lost contact with your fr v.1

You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time Write a letter to the editor In your letter Say which edition and when did the article appear Explain why you lost contact with your fr v. 1
As the world becomes more integrated, using the Internet is becoming more popular in both developed and developing countries. Some people think that the more widely-used Internet is, the more isolated society is. However, I argue that the Internet can affect family, friends, and colleagues in both good and bad ways. Firstly, the Internet has the potential to diminish family life, but also enhance it. It helps members in a family stay in touch with each other. It is particularly true for foreign students who want to call their families without too expensive tax. However, couples are easily addicted to online gaming or other online activities. This leads to children's ignorance and carelessness or even a bad example. Secondly, the Internet can distract people from friends, but it also helps people to keep and make friends. For example, it is possible for an injured person stuck at home to use the internet to keep in touch with his friends. Evenly, people can meet friends through social networking. In contrast, shy teens who are always surfing the Internet may lose their social skills or be taken advantage of by their friends they have never met. Similarly, the Internet robs workers' time for face- to- face meeting; however, it can also make it easier to work together. Instead of going out for a meeting, workers tend to read emails all day. Using too much computer may make people less active. However, the Internet brings several advantages to workers. For instance, emails and instant messaging are more useful than phoning for collaboration. Moreover, the Internet allows workers to work from a far distance in case they cannot go to the office. to sum up, the Internet can make our life better or worse. If used appropriately, it can create more togetherness than we thought.
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developing countries
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people
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think
that the more
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used
Internet is, the more isolated society is.
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, I argue that the Internet can affect
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family
,
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friends
, and colleagues in both
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good
and
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bad
ways.

Firstly
, the Internet has the potential to diminish
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family
life,
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but
also
enhance it. It
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helps
members in a
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family
stay in touch with each other. It is
particularly
true for foreign students who want to call their
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families
without too expensive tax.
However
, couples are
easily
addicted to online gaming or other online activities. This leads to children's ignorance and carelessness or even a
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bad
example.

Secondly
, the Internet can distract
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people
from
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friends
,
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but
it
also
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helps
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people
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keep
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friends
.
For example
, it is possible for an injured person stuck at home to
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use
the internet to
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keep
in touch with his
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friends
.
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,
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people
can
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meet
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friends
through social networking.
In contrast
, shy teens who are always surfing the Internet may lose their social
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skills
or
be taken
advantage of by their
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friends
they have never met.

Similarly
, the Internet robs workers' time for face- to- face meeting;
however
, it can
also
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make
it easier to work together.
Instead
of going out for a meeting, workers tend to read emails all day. Using too much computer may
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
less active.
However
, the Internet brings several advantages to workers.
For instance
, emails and instant messaging are more useful than phoning for collaboration.
Moreover
, the Internet
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allows
workers to work from a far distance in case they cannot go to the office.

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to
sum up, the Internet can
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make
our life better or worse. If
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used
appropriately
, it can create more togetherness than we
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thought
.
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IELTS essay You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time Write a letter to the editor In your letter Say which edition and when did the article appear Explain why you lost contact with your fr v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
301 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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