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You have missed some important papers accidently in a taxi. Write a letter to the manager of the Taxi company. In your letter: ⦁ Give the details of your journey⦁ Explain why those papers are important for you⦁ Suggest what can the manager do v.1

You have missed some important papers accidently in a taxi. Write a letter to the manager of the Taxi company. In your letter: ⦁ Give the details of your journey⦁ Explain why those papers are important for you⦁ Suggest what can the manager do v. 1
In some part of Europe as a continent, children between the age range of 11 or 13 go to school to acquire more practical skills to aid them getting a job, whereas so many other children just stay in schools that provide a general academic level of education. For example, for schools in the under developing countries, they would rather just pass on the already existing knowledge they have with the children in their schools because it is a basic way that worked out for them instead of going the extra mile of acquiring new skills. Firstly, I think the educational body in the countries should make sure the schools are properly screened before certifying them to pass on knowledge to the children. For example, growing up as a little child the only thing was close to a practical skill for us back then in school was sports and clay moulding, although not everyone participated and it was not mandatory unlike this present time where there are several options. Secondly, schools should be well equipped with properly seasoned and trained teachers to give the best learning experience to the children. The level and quality of education given to the children from infant stage would go a long way in carving out a good amount of options when it is time to determine or choose a career path hence the need for a good learning curriculum with practical skills. For example, these days there are children within the age range of 11 and 15 with unbelievable practical skills and it is as a result of the good curriculum and the teaching of the school although the child's interest and commitment to learning cannot be underestimated. In conclusion, with a properly monitored, organised and up to date curriculum, well trained professionals as teachers and basic learning amenities, schools would do well to prepare the students for the world of work.
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children
between the age range of 11 or 13
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to
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school
to acquire more
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practical
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skills
to aid them getting a job, whereas
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so
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other
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children
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stay in
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schools
that provide a general academic level of education.
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schools
in the under
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developing countries
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rather
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just
pass on the already existing knowledge they have with the
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children
in their
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schools
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because
it is a basic way that worked out for them
instead
of going the extra mile of acquiring new
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skills
.

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, I
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think
the educational body in the countries should
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make
sure the
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schools
are
properly
screened
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before
certifying them to pass on knowledge to the
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children
.
For example
, growing up as a
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little
child the
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thing was close to a
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practical
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skill
for us back then in
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school
was sports and clay
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moulding
, although not everyone participated and it was not mandatory unlike this present
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time where
there are several options.

Secondly
,
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schools
should be
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well equipped
with
properly
seasoned and trained teachers to give the best
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learning
experience to the
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children
. The level and quality of education
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given
to the
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children
from infant stage would go a long way in carving out a
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good
amount of options when it is time to determine or choose a career path
hence
the need for a
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good
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learning
curriculum with
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practical
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skills
.
For example
, these days there are
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children
within the age range of 11 and 15 with unbelievable
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practical
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skills
and it is
as a result
of the
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good
curriculum and the teaching of the
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school
although the child's interest and commitment to
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learning
cannot
be underestimated
.

In conclusion
, with a
properly
monitored,
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organised
and up to date curriculum,
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well trained
professionals as teachers and basic
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learning
amenities,
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schools
would do well to prepare the students for the world of work.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You have missed some important papers accidently in a taxi. Write a letter to the manager of the Taxi company. In your letter: ⦁ Give the details of your journey⦁ Explain why those papers are important for you⦁ Suggest what can the manager do v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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