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You ride a bicycle to work, but there is a problem with the parking. Write a letter to the manager of the Parking Management Company. In your letter, you should tell: • why you ride a bicycle to work • what the problem is with the parking • v.1

You ride a bicycle to work, but there is a problem with the parking. Write a letter to the manager of the Parking Management Company. In your letter, you should tell: • why you ride a bicycle to work • what the problem is with the parking • v. 1
It is a major issue the increasing of the population in the cities. In this essay, I will briefly discuss in terms of two main problems with some suggestions. In the modern life, the individual prefers living in the major cities, because of more quality of life standard. Due to, the governments invest in there more than rural areas. The growth of the population who stay in the urban can not inhibited day by day. Therefore, some problems have occurred in the way of irrepressible. One of them, public transport cannot enough to carry all people. The citizens want to perceive in order to travel their own automobile. The motorways develop, the consuming of oil skyrockets. Meanwhile, air pollution emerges the result of these habits, not only the cars, also over consuming in the cities. That is to say, the most crucial issue is pollutants in the air, the second one the decreasing life standard in the neighbourhood, particularly in public transport. On the other hand, the governments should take some measures to solve these chain issues. Firstly, they can invest all around the country, also the rural areas get some charming by the some green lands, gardens, even also town museums. In addition to this, they can impose some tax to live in major cities, so the people can think deeply to move from their town. However, if the everybody is aware of these, nothing would not change uncontrolled. They fell responsibility to prefer the bus or subway is overcrowded whether they are not convenient to travel any more. Both of them, the authorities and individuals should take care about the environments and consuming habits. In conclusion, I restate that it is clear there are two main problems in the urban life, transport and air pollutants. The precautions should be enabled to enact by the governments managements. They are can be some tax or even restriction accommodation of the cities. In the future, the people will be taking responsibility to protect the environment without thinking about self comfort supporting by the authorities.
It is a major issue the increasing of the population in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
. In this essay, I will
briefly
discuss in terms of two main problems with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
suggestions.

In the modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
, the individual prefers living in the major
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of more quality of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
standard. Due to, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
invest in there more than rural areas. The growth of the population who stay in the urban can not
The verb 'can' requires base form of the verb: "inhibit"
inhibited
day by day.
Therefore
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
problems have occurred in the way of irrepressible. One of them, public transport cannot
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to carry all
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. The citizens want to perceive in order to travel their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
automobile. The motorways develop, the consuming of oil skyrockets. Meanwhile, air pollution emerges the result of these habits, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the cars,
also
over consuming in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
.
That is
to say, the most crucial issue is pollutants in the air, the second one the decreasing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
standard in the
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbourhood' is British English.
neighbourhood
,
particularly
in public transport.

On the other hand
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should take
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
measures to solve these chain issues.
Firstly
, they can invest all around the country,
also
the rural areas
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
charming by the
Did you mean "same"?
some
green lands, gardens, even
also
town museums.
In addition
to this, they can impose
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
tax to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in major
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cities
,
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so
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
deeply
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
from their town.
However
, if
Possible typo. Did you mean "the" or "everybody"?
the everybody
is aware of these, nothing would not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
uncontrolled. They fell responsibility to prefer the bus or subway
is overcrowded
whether they are not convenient to travel
Did you mean the adverb "anymore"?
any more
. Both of them, the authorities and individuals should take care about the environments and consuming habits.

In conclusion
, I restate that it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
there are two main problems in the urban
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
, transport and air pollutants. The precautions should
be enabled
to enact by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
managements. They are can be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
tax or even restriction accommodation of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
. In the future, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
will be taking responsibility to protect the environment without thinking about self comfort supporting by the authorities.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay You ride a bicycle to work, but there is a problem with the parking. Write a letter to the manager of the Parking Management Company. In your letter, you should tell: • why you ride a bicycle to work • what the problem is with the parking • v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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