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Recently you have attended a job interview which went well, but you are still waiting for the result. Write a letter to HR manager of the company. In your letter, you should: • give details of the job • tell why you think the interview went well v.1

Recently you have attended a job interview which went well, but you are still waiting for the result. Write a letter to HR manager of the company. In your letter, you should: • give details of the job • tell why you think the interview went well v. 1
One policy that is currently being debated in society concerns the issue of whether the authorities ought to a financial fine on drivers who use their vehicles during rush hour to reduce pollution. Even though there are people who think that policy is negative, I personally think that this policy would be effective because it would lead to smooth traffic condition. First of all, the policy of charging fees for driving in busy areas during peak hours would be advantageous because most drivers will react sensitively to additional financial fees. To be more specific, due to the fact that most of the drivers that would be affected by this traffic fee are those who are using mobility for leisure-related purpose, these drivers can control when and where they have to travel. For this reason, trying to control their choices by charging financial fees would give them an incentive to drive cars less often and successfully reduce emission of air pollution from exhaust fumes. This shows that enacting financial penalties for using vehicles will have a generally positive effect on the status of air pollution. Moreover, it is acknowledged that charging fees to reduce pollution and the use of vehicles can also lead to environmental positive effects because this policy would encourage preservation of the natural environments. For instance, people would respond to these compulsory fees by considering their overall effect on the environment and reducing other forms of pollution such as waste pollution from garbage. Due to this, the condition of the ecosystem would improve. This demonstrates that using financial fees to reduce pollution optimal strategy that can fix this issue. Overall, after considering both of these perspectives, I agree with the assertion that imposing a fee on drivers who use their vehicles during rush hour can help cut down on air pollution from exhaust fumes. This is due to the fact that I personally believe that the effects of such a policy will ultimately alleviate environmental problems.
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financial
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drivers
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vehicles
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reduce
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pollution
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people
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policy
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because
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, the
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policy
of charging
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fees
for driving in busy areas during peak hours would be advantageous
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because
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drivers
will react
sensitively
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financial
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fees
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drivers
that would be
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affected
by this traffic
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are those
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who
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drivers
can control when and where they
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have to
travel.
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, trying to control their choices by charging
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financial
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fees
would give them an incentive to drive cars less
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often
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successfully
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reduce
emission of air
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pollution
from exhaust fumes. This
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shows
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financial
penalties for using
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vehicles
will have a
generally
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positive
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effect
on the status of air pollution.

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, it
is acknowledged
that charging
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fees
to
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reduce
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pollution
and the
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use
of
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vehicles
can
also
lead to environmental
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positive
effects
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would encourage preservation of the natural environments.
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,
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people
would respond to these compulsory
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fees
by considering their
overall
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effect
on the environment and reducing other forms of
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pollution
such as waste
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pollution
from garbage. Due to this, the condition of the ecosystem would
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improve
. This demonstrates that using
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financial
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fees
to
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reduce
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pollution
optimal strategy that can
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fix
this issue.

Overall
, after considering both of these perspectives, I
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agree
with the assertion that imposing a
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fee
on
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drivers
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who
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use
their
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vehicles
during rush hour can
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help
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cut
down on air
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pollution
from exhaust fumes.
This is due to the fact that
I
personally
believe that the effects of such a
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policy
will
ultimately
alleviate environmental problems.
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IELTS essay Recently you have attended a job interview which went well, but you are still waiting for the result. Write a letter to HR manager of the company. In your letter, you should: • give details of the job • tell why you think the interview went well v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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