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You ride a bicycle to work, but there is a problem with the parking. Write a letter to the manager of the Parking Management Company. In your letter, you should tell: •why you ride a bicycle to work•what the problem is with the parking•what your sugge v.2

You ride a bicycle to work, but there is a problem with the parking. Write a letter to the manager of the Parking Management Company. In your letter, you should tell: •why you ride a bicycle to work•what the problem is with the parking•what your sugge v. 2
International Marketing is gaining widespread popularity as more and more multinational companies enter untapped foreign markets. While it might have its own benefits many would consider it as an act of invasion by the corporates. In spite the advent of such products inciting curiosity amongst the scientific community of the consumer country, its effect on indigenous industries if far more devastating and in my opinion must be considered as an intrusion into the economy. The supply of foreign products through its marketing in different markets have some positive implications towards the community. As every products development or innovation in based on the shortcomings of its already existing counterpart, it adds value to it, and when such products make their way into foreign markets they are easily accepted by the consumers. This also pushes the consumer country's innovators to develop it further to well meet their own needs thus spreading knowledge, culture etc. For instance, after the launch of the first LED bulb in Indian market by AP Lightings Ltd, many Indian entrepreneurs sprung up with more efficient options of the bulb, well suited for Indian use. However, the impact of such intrusion cannot be neglected. As these goods and services make their way into the country's market they severely affect the indigenous industries. This is mainly because the outsider's products are often advertised as having unique features along with it being cheaper and more reliable than the in-house developed alternative. For example, after the advent of synthetic cloth in the Indian market, particularly nylon which had a peculiar shine, greatly impacted the Indian Khadi textile mills, plunging their market share down from 60% to mere 10% in just three years. In conclusion, international marketing has its own benefit such as encouraging the scientific temperament of the consumer country whereas it poses a grave danger for the home grown industries as their sales and revenue plummets. In my opinion, the foreign products have great potential to disrupt the in-house manufacturing units and must be considered as an invasion and an intrusion into the nation.
International Marketing is gaining widespread popularity as more and more multinational
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companies
enter untapped
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foreign
markets. While it might have its
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own
benefits
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many
would consider it as an act of invasion by the
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corporates
. In spite the advent of such
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products
inciting curiosity amongst the scientific community of the
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consumer
country, its effect on indigenous industries if far more devastating and in my opinion
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be considered
as an intrusion into the economy.

The supply of
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foreign
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products
through its marketing in
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different
markets have
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some
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positive
implications towards the community. As every
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products
development or innovation in based on the shortcomings of its already existing counterpart, it
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adds
value to it, and when such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
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make
their way into
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foreign
markets they are
easily
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accepted
by the
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consumers
. This
also
pushes the
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consumer
country's innovators to develop it
further
to well
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meet
their
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own
needs
thus
spreading knowledge, culture etc.
For instance
, after the launch of the
first
LED bulb in Indian
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market
by AP
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Lightings
Ltd,
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many
Indian entrepreneurs sprung up with more efficient options of the bulb, well suited for Indian
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use
.
However
, the impact of such intrusion cannot
be neglected
.

As these
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goods
and services
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make
their way into the country's
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market
they
severely
affect the indigenous industries. This is
mainly
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because
the outsider's
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products
are
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often
advertised as having unique features along with it being cheaper and more reliable than the in-
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house
developed alternative.
For example
, after the advent of synthetic cloth in the Indian
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
market
,
particularly
nylon which had a peculiar shine,
greatly
impacted the Indian
Possible spelling mistake found.
Khadi
textile mills, plunging their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
market
share down from 60% to mere 10% in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
three years.

In conclusion
, international marketing has its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
benefit such as encouraging the scientific temperament of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
consumer
country whereas it poses a grave
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
for the
This word is normally spelled as one.
home grown
industries as their sales and revenue plummets. In my opinion, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foreign
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
have great potential to disrupt the in-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
manufacturing units and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be considered
as an invasion and an intrusion into the nation.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay You ride a bicycle to work, but there is a problem with the parking. Write a letter to the manager of the Parking Management Company. In your letter, you should tell: •why you ride a bicycle to work•what the problem is with the parking•what your sugge v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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